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Organ donations as well as organ transplants have not been around that long. Dating back to the 50’s is when the first successful organ transplant was done. You may be wondering why this is relevant to be talked about, but the issue is that the organ donation system is unethical.
For various reasons , people of all age groups may need organ transplants sometime in their life. In America , every 10 minutes a new person is added to the waiting list ( v. Donate Life America). Things such as COPD, diabetes , cellulitis , etc. can cause one or more of your organ systems to fail. When this happens , if severe, an organ transplant will be necessary. It seems like an easy process but in reality it has its highs and lows. Being that the waitlist is so long , the possibilities of getting a transplant is not guaranteed, and oftentimes patients pass away waiting days , weeks , and even months to get their procedure done.
The way the organ transplant list works is complicated to say the least. Just because you have a failing organ does not guarantee that you will even be put on the waiting list. Before you get put on the waiting list you have to get evaluated , then medical professionals decide whether or not you are eligible for a transplant. If you are eligible then you are added to the OPTN list , OPTN meaning Organ Procurement and Transplant Network. After that the urgency of your situation is taken into consideration. Along with that , the blood type, type of organ and the specific tissue as well need to be matched up to the best candidate.
This process can be an emotional rollercoaster for both parties. Both parties meaning the person giving up their organ as well as the one receiving the organ. This is because with certain organs like the heart, it is needed to keep a person alive, so when a person is receiving a heart transplant the person who is giving up their organ is going to pass away. While someone is given a second chance at life , someone else is breathing their last breath.
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
My first impression is that this looks more like a White Paper than a draft of your Definition Argument, Chance. I am, however, delighted to see that you’re posting meaningful language on your topic.
My second observation is that you didn’t create TWO posts as you should have, a Definition and a Definition Rewrite containing the same material. I want to preserve the first draft as it appeared so that when you move both items into your Portfolio, we’ll be able to compare the first and the latest draft side by side.
SO . . . I’ve taken this post OUT OF the Definition category and put it into the Definition Rewrite category only. That way, I’ll be responding with feedback to your Rewrite post, which was the plan.
While I’m glad to see language pertinent to your topic, Chance, I have to say I don’t see anything in what you’ve written that advances your stated hypothesis that “the organ donation system is unethical.” That is a very worthwhile hypothesis, and it requires categorical argument: “The organ donation system belongs to the category: unethical systems.”
Certainly a process that depends on too much bureaucracy might be administered less than ethically, but you don’t suggest that there’s anything shady about the qualification process so far. You don’t really need to spend many words proving that lots of people need donated organs to show the system is unethical. What you do need to show is that something in the qualification process, or the way donors are recruited, or the way recipients are selected, is less than fair or, worse, is corrupt. I’ll be looking for evidence of something like that in your next revision.
Your comma punctuation is very odd. For some reason, you show word spaces BEFORE your commas 7 times in your second paragraph, 3 times in your third, and once in your fourth. Fix those and watch out for the problem as you proceed.
Feedback is a conversation, Chance. I require your response to keep the process moving along. 🙂