1st opening:
Oversleeping continues to rob people of their fullest lives . The disastrous health damages range from anxiety and depression to chronic heart disease. When they get the right amount of sleep, they’ll live healthier lives.
2nd opening:
Oversleeping is the reason why so many people continue to face adversities in their lives. People don’t understand the calamitous health/mental problems(such as anxiety and depression) that oversleeping leads to. Until they do, they will continue to live afflictive lives.
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
I certainly hope you can do better than this, Fatboy.
You didn’t ask for Feedback, but it’s at the top of the blog where I couldn’t ignore it.
The sentences and verbs are weak. Several of the sentences don’t qualify as sentences at all. I’ll be delighted to remove these comments immediately upon your radical revisions. Do you need specific advice, or do you understand what’s needed?
Provisionally graded. This post is eligible for Revision and a Regrade.
Yes I would like specific advice, thank you
The insufficient amount of people that are informed about oversleeping will cause people to not be able to live their life to their fullest extent.
—The sentence misses its own point, which is the danger of oversleeping, not how few people are informed about the danger of oversleeping.
—And again, the point is that people will not live their full life, NOT that they won’t be ABLE to live their full life.
—The grammar error is a violation of Rule 5 from the Fails For Grammar list.
—To Open Strong: make the boldest claim, using the Real Subject and the most Robust Verb.
Maybe: “Oversleeping robs people of their fullest life.”
The effects of oversleeping and how disastrous the damages that are caused to your health ranges from anxiety and depression to even chronic diseases such as heart problems.
—This is not a legal sentence.
—It’s missing a verb in the clause that is part of the second subject: ARE
—Here’s where it would go: 1) The effects of oversleeping and 2) how disastrous the damages that are caused to your health ARE . . . .
—So, the verb that follows, RANGES, needs to be plural to match the two subjects.
—The grammar error in that case is a violation of Rule 14 of the FFG list.
—To Open Strong: bold claim, Real Subject, Robust Verb as before, so:
—Maybe: “The disastrous health damages range from anxiety and depression to chronic heart disease.”
The sooner people take into consideration how important watching how much they sleep, the sooner they will start living healthier lives.
—This is not a legal sentence.
—Again, it’s missing its verb in the clause about watching: IS
—Here’s where it would go: The sooner people take into consideration how important watching how much they sleep IS . . . .
—The sentence misses its own point.
—What’s important is how much people SLEEP, not how much they WATCH how much they sleep or how much they TAKE INTO CONSIDERATION HOW IMPORTANT WATCHING HOW MUCH THEY SLEEP is.
Maybe: “When they get the right amount of sleep, they’ll live healthy lives.”
With this modeling, can you improve the 2nd version?
I took your feedback into my writing, I think is the one. If there is more feedback I will be more than glad to continue to improve my writing.
Much better.