1. Coats wasn’t fired because he was using a legal drug, marijuana, for a legitimate purpose for which he had a prescription. He was fired for violating workplace policy.
Coats was fired for violating workplace policy not for his use of marijuana, which he has a prescription for.
2. An employer isn’t able to fire a person who has anxiety because they are taking the correct medication to deal with the issue.
Due to effective medicine, an employer cant fire someone who suffers from anxiety.
3. Employees don’t get fired for going out and having a few beers after work because alcohol is legal, but in Colorado so is marijuana.
Colorado has declared marijuana legal which means this is treated the same as employees drinking alcohol after work.
4. Coats shouldn’t have been fired because he was trying to treat the pain he endured on a daily basis.
Coats should not of been fired for treating his pain that he deals with daily.
5. It’s not fair to discriminate against him because he was able to ease the pain of his multiple spasms by using marijuana.
It is unfair to discriminate against him when he was just trying to ease the pain that comes from his multiple spasms.
6. Coats wasn’t harming anyone at his job because he was smoking marijuana but he was doing so on his own time and not at work.
Coats smoking marijuana in his free time wasn’t harming anyone at his job.
7. Omar Gonzalez didn’t penetrate deep into the White House because of the swift actions of Secret Service agents.
The Secret Service agents made swift actions to top Omar Gonzalez from penetrating deeply into the White House.
8. The Secret Service isn’t being compelled to explain its actions because of the way it responded to the breach of the White House, but how the breach occurred is under question.
The Secret Service is being compelled to answer how the breach occurred and not their response.
9. Secret Service chief Julia Pierson won’t be fired because of her testimony before Congress yesterday. Her incompetence might cost her her job though.
Although Secret Service chief Julia Pierson wont be fired for her testimony before congress, her incompetence may cause her to lose her job.
10. Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against the intruder because he was carrying a knife with a 4-inch blade.
The intrudering carrying a 4-inch blade dissuaded the Secret Service agents from using deadly force.
1. Beautiful. Minor quibble: “for which he had a prescription.”
2. I admire the effort here, Shxrk, but not the result. As I read your sentence, employers are taking a medicine that prevents them from firing employees.
Simplify when possible:
Employers can’t fire employees who appropriately medicate their anxiety.
3. Unique and very nice.
4. Great approach. Sloppy execution. The construction is “should HAVE” regardless of how we pronounce “shoulda.”
Simplify when possible: Coats should not HAVE been fired for treating his chronic pain.
5. I love turning the negative “it is NOT fair” into the positive “It is unfair.” Solves the whole problem.
6. Very nice.
7. Very nice. Want to deploy the Robust Verbs approach? Get rid of as many “made nouns” constructions as you can.
The Secret Service agents ACTED SWIFTLY to stop Omar Gonzalez from penetrating deep into the White House.
8. Love the approach, but the execution creates confusion. Are they being asked to answer for HOW their response OCCURRED? Your sentence says they are.
How about: “The Secret Service is being compelled to explain the breach, not their response.”
9. Wordy but logically perfect.
10. I don’t think so.
Wielding a knife in the White House is not dissuasive. Try another approach?