Original:

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Revised:

Heroin addicts committing malefactions to fortify their habits concerns the streets of Vancouver. The Addicts will undertake sundry schemes to get their hands on the drug, including malefaction. The staple of malefactions that addicts are kenned for is purloining, and trespassing, but malefactions are not just inhibited to these. The setback of the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program is the program itself is not compulsorily concerned with the wellbeing of the patients, and more concerned with the public image of the city. Giving addicts contact with heroin will lead to less minor transgressions. Hospitals have their hands tied when dealing with addicts that cannot control their addictions, and the payments for avail. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fine-tune the city but not the addiction that these people face. It was engendered to make Vancouver a better environment for its citizens, but it fails to avail the people who are genuinely struggling.