22 Class THU NOV 17
Riddle
A Quick Edit
Due to the fitness industry being built on deceit, our youth’s future is being jeopardized by these false “influencers.” Our kids are in imminent physical and mental harm due to the spread of misinformation and the intentional advertisement of dangerous substances.
Let’s turn these passive sentences into bold claims by choosing the best Subjects and the most Robust verbs.
Sources Unit
Sources Workshop Number 2
Responsive to Student X’s trouble finding academic sources
Located in Course Documents/Research Tips/Sources Workshop
Rebuttal Unit
For the sake of practice, let’s assume you are strongly in favor of nuclear power as an alternative to burning fossil fuels. Nuclear doesn’t burn petroleum, coal, or natural gas. It doesn’t emit carbon dioxide or methane. It is, by comparison to many alternatives, a clean and sustainable fuel for producing electricity. You’re writing a paper to promote new investment in nuclear power plants.
In your research, you run across an article by Bob Herbert in the New York Times that concerns you. Herbert sounds pretty knowledgeable, and you know he speaks compellingly for opponents of nuclear power in the US. How can you USE HIS ARTICLE in your Rebuttal Argument?
Does he make mistakes of logic? Does he apply his evidence inappropriately? Does he complain of cost overruns that don’t actually result in overly expensive power? Does he concentrate on one or two objections and ignore all the advantages of nuclear power? Does he set up a false choice between two options when there are other alternatives?
Read the article now:
If you encounter a paywall, find the full text (and more!) at:
- Rebuttal Practice: A Price Too High?
Writing Skills
Take-Home Exercises
- Revisions—Magical Dependency
- Editing for Logic
Next Portfolio Task
- Task: Rebuttal Argument: My Worthy Opponent Is Wrong!
- DUE TUE NOV 22 (11:59PM MON NOV 21)
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
Always in the independent clause, carry’s the more important idea. One ending the addiction, one lowering crime rate.
Two people in jackets and with a bag, a father and a son. In an outdoor setting with trees and hills. Drawing, far away from the city and possibility of camping with the roll on the side of the bag, almost like a sleeping bag. Camera is beginning to zoom out, appears that he is pointing towards something to show to his son. Inclusion of the city in the background.
Pretty sure I wouldn’t understand these notes within a week.
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4/11/22 44Elk In-Class Notes:
Today, I started class by looking at fate and the phrase, “everything happens for a reason.” I answered if four paragraphs convey the belief in fate or not.
Next, we looked at independent clauses and good grammatical choices to emphasize claims. We did an exercise. We practiced using word choices to emphasize specific parts of our sentences.
We did another exercise analyzing visual rhetoric in a 30-second ad. We also looked at a classmate’s visual-rhetoric analysis, and we first determined that the classmate merely described what was there without describing what it meant. We looked at another classmate’s analysis too. At this point, we’re analyzing just the first second of multiple videos as deeply as we can.
Next, we looked at the “Editing for Logic” assignment.
Finally, we took a look at our Rebuttal Argument assignment due by next Monday. I believe the best rebuttal to MY argument would be that Blizzard does not need to be better due to their recent actions. I will destroy this argument by going through the vast history of every time the Overwatch team has said the exact same thing without following through.
I’m going to try to convince you that there’s a difference between writing “about” a topic and sharing the content or lesson of that topic.
You say:
I say:
Your prescription for your own Rebuttal argument salvages your Notes for today.
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Started with declarations of faith:
I think something as cliche as “everything happens for a reason” in itself isn’t faith driven. It has a lot of applicability with many meanings depending on its use. I guess that’s everything though
Independent vs dependent clauses:
Independent: noun, verb – complete sentence on its own
Dependent: same thing as independent, but adding a descriptor such as “since” that allows for the sentence to be dependent on an explanation
Dependent clauses minimize objections
Exercise:
1: emphasizing the comfort
2: emphasizing cost
3: emphasizing feelings based on cost
Visual rhetoric:
Based on the lengthy description it takes to use a visual source such as a video, I feel like unless it is an amazing source, a writer will lose a reader using 1000 words to describe one video. It would be faster for the reader to just watch the video then come back and read the essay. But I guess it’s also a good thing if you need to reach a word count haha
Editing for logic
Rebuttal argument
Nice: Dependent clauses minimize objections
Obviously the exercise of describing the video has nothing to do with benefitting the reader.
3/3
Independent and dependent clauses are used throughout our writing but we still are not able to identify them. The issue is that we as writers will just write without knowing more skills to improve our writing.
The riddle that we started in class made me think of what the same quote means in each of the four statements. They all are worded differently which makes the quote’s context to be different.
The visual rhetoric called outdoor safe in just the first second has a lot of details that make the viewer think about what they are trying to show. The writer of the ads thinks about every second as they need to think from the viewer’s perspective.
Um . . .
I deliberately demonstrated the VALUE of independent clauses for maximizing the impact of the claims they contain, and the VALUE of dependent clauses to minimize objections to those claims.
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– fate and “everything happens for a reason” doesn’t sit well with me. Coming from a religious household I can say that the only good things in my life that have happened have been from my own hand.
– independent clauses, complex sentences, dependent clauses all create thoughts.
– dependent clauses are incomplete and DEPENDENT on the other parts of the sentence.
– Dependent clauses can be used to minimize objection to claims
– Independent clauses can be used to increase the strength in a claim.
– Dependent clauses will start usually with transition words like although, while, also, and others like that.
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Yeah.
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1. Fate is real and everything happens for a reason. Jay was supposed to crash that day.
2. Everything happens for a reason because after the accident kay quit her unhealthy drinking habits
3. After the death of Kay’s daughter Jay is very sad about it. This is not a declaration in fate but it declares that Jay will leave every action to god from here on out
4. This is a declaration in fate because Zed decides he will now raise his daughter better than Jay.
since: transition word
Antecedent needs to be clear
Clear connection between pronoun and antecedent does matter
The director does everything for a reason
For rebuttal essay the opponent must be worthy
I disagree with all of your Fate explanations ( 🙂 ), but your Notes are fine.
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-Jay’s erratic driving causes a traffic accident that severely wounds another driver and her child but spares Jay any injury and barely even damages his car. He is however arrested on suspicion of recklessness following an investigation of the accident scene.
– That is an example of not a declaration of faith. They are just saying that it’s ok. Everything happens for a reason because after the accident kay quit her unhealthy drinking habits.
-Since it lowers the crime rate by giving free heroin to the addicts, the program won’t help them end their addiction.
-While it doesn’t help addicts end their addiction, the program reduces the crime rates in the city by providing the addicts free heroin in the cleanest way possible.
-The Rebuttal Argument is one of THREE Short Arguments; whose contents you will combine at the end of the semester.
-We looked at the “Editing for Logic” assignment
Maybe they make sense to you.
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My Notes:
Clauses: Independent clauses emphasize claims and dependent clauses minimize objects.
Visual Rhetoric; discusses thoroughly another ad, of someone’s rhetoric essay. An outdoor nature cartoon ad, a concert covid ad was shown, a drug impaired driving ad, and a belonging begins with us ad.
Editing for logic/rebuttal argument; Rebuttal due Monday next week. Editing for logic complete today.
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Independent clauses – Have a subject/verb
Dependent Clauses- Do not have both a subject and verb, or are missing something.
Adding transition words turns independent clauses into dependent clauses because the sentence becomes incomplete.
Independent clauses contain primary claims.
Dependent clauses minimize claims.
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1. everything happens for a reason is a clear declaration of fate
since the program lowers the crime rate – dependent clause
the people of Vancouver approve of it – independent clause
when you are presented with visual evidence, your brain wants the most simple conclusion
the reader depends on the writer to explain everything that made them come to a certain conclusion
rebuttal argument – identify and demolish the strongest argument against your thesis
– do not advance this argument, instead go against it to furthermore prove your original thesis
– identify all different arguments that go against your thesis
– identify all qualifications that support your thesis
Very nice Notes, Swim.
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Things happen as a lesson and a way of learning from your mistakes.
She needed to struggle to realize that she needed help, she had to suffer to take ownership. This is not fate, this is getting control of your life and making a change.
God has complete control of what happens. It is out of his control. This is the belief of fate and in God’s will.
You control your own fate, your success is determined by how much you put in and how well you do the things you are required to do.
-Independent clause is a subject and verb that completes a simple thought.
-Compound sentences are two or more independent clauses in a sentence.
-You can create a dependent clause from an independent clause by adding a word. (ex. since)
-location and antecedent are important for sentence structure.
-the independent clause carries the more important idea
-in visual rhetoric, you must describe literally everything you see.
-the person who reads your paper should not have to watch the video to understand what it is that the viewer is seeing
-Negative Sports Media: Negative news has taken priority in society. Reporters tend to focus on the negatives outside of their respective playing fields.
Hooray Sleep: Getting enough sleep helps with efficiency of the brain and performance in school.
-Failing Schools: Smaller schools help underprivileged kids with better education. Highly populated areas result in lower academic performance. So, lower class sizes results in more beneficial learning.
-Mr. Lamb’s Dignified Death: Paul Lamb has suffered daily since his car accident twenty three years ago. Leaving him quadriplegic, the only thing his body does daily is drip morphine in his body. He continues to fight to end his suffering, but no court judge has allowed him to do so thus far.
Most thorough notes of the day.
4/3
We started with talking about fate in a riddle. I feel that it is very easy to confuse a coincidence with fate, that was my technique when attempting the exercise. We then began talking about independent and dependent clauses. An independent clause can stand alone as a sentence by itself, and expresses a full thought. While a dependent clause is a combination of two or more independent clauses, that will put them together. Alone a dependent clause does not express a full thought. Are also used to minimize objections. We continued our unit of visual rhetoric. We looked at our classmates’ visual rhetoric argument assignment and broke down a classmate’s video. We evaluated a video regarding a father son duo on a camping trip in the woods. We also began to discuss our rebuttal argument. The purpose of this argument is to rebut not advance the strongest rebuttal to your own thesis. Then we began an assignment called editing for logic.
Mostly “talked about” language, but enough content to qualify as good notes.
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– The fates riddle was interesting because I’ve seen scenarios like this, but considering fate in those scenarios never came up. usually those scenarios would be brought up in alcohol/drug safety lesson. Kay’s daughter dying was sad, and it made sense that she changed her life around because of that. Jay should drive more carefully.
– Analyzing the videos made it easier to understand what we have to do for the visual rhetoric assignment. In the first video with father and son in the forest, immediately you can tell that the ad would be something about nature just because of the landscape. In the second video with the mat, it was not clear where the video would go because there was no obvious indication. When i saw the white smoke, I first thought that it was really cold and cold air was leaving her mouth. I wasn’t able to tell whether or not the window was up, but if it was, then it would make sense. The last video with the artist, everything seemed so clear. This was probably because the floor was open and everything was white giving off modern and clean vibes.
– The rebuttal essay is making a counterargument and proving why that thinking is wrong.
I like: “proving why that thinking is wrong.”
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You can have complex sentences which connect a dependant clause to an independent clause
Be sure to put the minimus in the dependent clause.
The author wants to highlight the benefit because he minimizes the cost
You’re not arguing against yourself your identifying an argument to yours and obliterating it
Most points of view don’t have an opposite, because we grew up having everything as a debate
Intriguing. Your mind is quite interesting, f0restrun.
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04/11/2022
Starting off class we discussed fate and how it can be described as everything that happens for a reason. In class, we went over four parts of a story and explained what things happened for a reason if it was fate or if it was something else.
I learned that independent clauses are complete sentences such as,” the program lowers the crime rate.” This idea carries the most important idea out of all the clauses. A compound sentence is when we add and connect two clauses. Complex two are more clauses. Dependent clauses do not finish their own thought so there is a sense of anticipation “Since the program lowers the crime rate, people of Vancouver approve of it.” Using the word since it is the word that makes the sentence a dependent clause. This is downplaying the statement such as having an “opportunity to thrive as a city” might be more beneficial than getting rid of drug addicts.
As a class, we looked over a couple of visual rhetoric examples and discussed what we saw in each ad video clip. This was a helpful exercise to remind me what are the expectations for the assignment.
A clarification:
A COMPOUND sentence is a combination of two or more INDEPENDENT clauses.
A COMPLEX sentence is a combination of one INDEPENDENT clause and one (or more) DEPENDENT clauses.
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Independent Clauses emphasize claims.
Dependent Clauses minimize Objections
When examining visual rhetoric it is important to note whether the piece is illustrated or not.
When examining visual rhetoric, explain the video as if the audience is unable to see the video.
Just enough to avoid an absence.
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Professor went over a riddle “Everything happens for a reason”
We turned these sentences into claims by choosing the best Subjects and the most Robust verbs.
We identified whether these declarations were expressions of fate
“Went over is Nuclear Worth the Risk?”
Rebuttal Unit, writing a paper to promote new investment in product
Rebuttals: Insufficient evidence rebuttal, Irrelevant evidence rebuttal, inconclusive evidence rebuttal, stacking the deck rebuttal, False analogy rebuttal, False choice rebuttal
– Active verbs tell you who did what. Passive verbs hide the identity of the “actor,” obscure responsibility.
– Simplicity is better. A very specific subject followed by a strong active verb should be the core of my sentences.
– First sentence of the paragraph should boldly, but briefly outline what will be discussed later.
– Having a credible source that opposes your point of view can be a good thing. Slowly chip away at it, disputing a couple of that source’s main points can completely shut down their argument.
– Sufficient evidence is enough to “win the pot.” One piece of killer evidence that refutes any amount of vague evidence that the credible author provides automatically makes you the winner.
– Finding a worthy opponent will make your refutation a whole lot better.
“Active verbs tell you who did what and passive verbs hide the identity of the actor.”
Starting off with a good claim that includes the subject and a verb, allows you to not matter what you put in front of it and behind it.
Doing this 10 times for each paragraph in a 10 paragraph essay will do you good in your reader’s eyes
If you have a killer evidence while your opponent has a regular piece of evidence, then you win
No matter how little evidence my opponent has, we can’t just walk in with no evidence at all. “You cannot win by saying ‘You haven’t shown me enough’”.
Notes:
– Active verbs place blame on subjects and add power to writing. Passive verbs can make writing bland. Rewriting sentences to use active verbs improves writing, making it stronger.
– When making a claim, create a bold, robust sentence with the essentials of information, adding more context afterword to make it better.
– A good tool for searching for new sources is to look for key words in your current evidence and search for that in google scholar. It can open up new topics and perspectives on texts.
– Use the perspective of an opponent as your ally. If you can refute their claims and use it to add onto your own argument, it can strengthen your work. Find evidence that is stronger than the evidence your opponent provides.
– You may not be able to find a direct opposite to your hypothesis, but you can but a worthy contrary argument from the varying perspectives.
Notes – Nov 17
Active verbs – who did what – Passive verbs – hide the identity of the actor. We want to be more passive because we don’t want to blame our audience or someone they are associated with for wrong doings. If you want to bash deceitful influences who aren’t these individuals than that is when we use active verbs. Is and Are are verbs we have to be careful about.
Make sentences as simple as possible and make sure you always specify your subject with a purpose. Bold claims are good for the start.
You can essentially refute anything from a paper with this being said we have to recognize this in our paper and be as clear and powerful as possible as to prevent this from happening.
Refuting 3- 4 claims is powerful so try to prevent this from happening entirely in our paper.Defining terms are specific as possible can help us become less refutable with.
If you are going to refute something in a paper try to give a good example to prove your point. For example if you are claiming “ there is insufficient amount of evidence” give good evidence that proves this and is more geared toward their point. This helps you win.
Another way to refute a similar point to the previous one is to state the evidence is not exactly revelation or accurate according to the claim. The way to refute this again can be finding evidence that actually is relevant to their point and by examining why the evidence they provided isn’t accurate.
Line of reasoning or leading up to a proof in relation to evidence is yet another way to get refuted. This expresses yet again that in my refutation paper I have to be clear and establish a line of reasoning so there is not confusion with my audience and so they cant say im “ Not making sense”
When we are refuting we must acknowledge “ common ground” between your point and the point your refuting. This is important because a criticism of your paper can simply be that your point is “based too much”. In recognizing agreeable points in the argument while still stressing what you find the most needed to refute than you are leaving your audience with no bad feelings toward you and therefore more inclined to follow along with your opinions.
A simple way to refute something is to find something inaccurate about it or a false association that is made. You can dispute this by simply giving the right answer or a more accurate comparison.
False choice which is followed by a false analogy if recognized can be a true disputing point for your audience.
Passive sentences hide the true responsibility of the one being accused.
As long as you have the strong core of your sentence and claims, the surrounding details can be whatever you want it to be.
Before writing, break the claim down to its simplest form
If your evidence is really good, then your evidence will be an effective enough rebuttal against an arguments weaker evidence.
Sometimes claims do not have an opposite side to it, but it may have a contrary that can serve as a suitable refutation
-Try and look out for passive verbs, for they could be changed into active verbs to produce a better sentence.
-You can add as much as you want in a sentence as long as the root of the sentence stays the same.
-Making good first sentences significantly increases the likelihood of a reader to continue reading your argument.
-A strong opponent can be your biggest ally in a rebuttal argument.
-All you need is one good piece of evidence that refutes whatever vague evidence the opponent offers then you have the high card.
-Can’t complain that there isn’t enough evidence. Bogus rebuttal.
-Most theses don’t have an opposite. Look for ideas contrary to your thesis to refute.
– Passive verbs hide the identity of the actor. They obscure the responsibility of the subject.
– Start by making the simplest claim you can to distill the contents of the paragraph into one sentence.
– The first sentences of each paragraph can serve as an outline for the whole thing.
– When you can find one good source, look to the sources of that article to find others.
– The claim that there is not enough evidence is not a good rebuttal. You have to provide at least a single piece of rebuttal evidence.
– Look for logical fallacy. Find a hole in the argument and use that to refute it.
– An effective rebuttal of a false choice is one that points out the unnamed third choice.
Class Notes-
Quick edit-
Passive verbs hide the identity of the actor. They obscure identity. We want to avoid this.
Due to the fitness industry being built on deceit, our youth’s future is being jeopardized by these false “influencers.” Our kids are in imminent physical and mental harm due to the spread of misinformation and the intentional advertisement of dangerous substances.
Phony fitness influencers jeopardize our youths’ physical and mental health by peddling dangerous substances.
This sentence uses active verbs, jeopardize, peddling to create a robust sentence
Start a paragraph with a simple sentence with a really specific subject with an active verb
“Not Proving enough evidence” is not a good retort. It is subjective and could be easily argued from the opposite perspective.
11/17 Notes
Active verbs tell you who did what. Passive verbs hide the identity of the actor and obscure responsibility.
Narrow down your paragraph to be relevant and active to create your thesis sentence.
The first sentence of each paragraph in our paper is what most readers will read first before deciding if they want to read the whole paper and the sources/information that we provide.
One piece of strong evidence to counteract the evidence the opponent offers is very effective.
A lot of the time, when we try super hard to make an uncharacteristic decision, it ends up being even more like something we’d usually do. This makes it seem very likely that fate is real. However, some horrible instances make me believe that fate is not real. Some things just happen as a result of people’s poor decisions and weren’t supposed to end up that way. Everything that happens is a result of the choices a person consciously makes.
We should make sure to have strong first sentences in each paragraph of our essays. Some readers will read the first sentence of each paragraph to see if they should continue reading.
In order to write an effective rebuttal, we should provide strong evidence to erase any doubts from our points. We should hear out opposing points and avoid making narrow analogies. We have to remember that changing our minds is okay. Not to mention, a powerful opponent we can destroy becomes our biggest ally. It is the key factor in changing the minds of those who disagree with us. We should try to look for refutation facts in our own argument.
Our rebuttals are due next Tuesday and if we write them early, our feedback will be responded to with enough time to revise it for a better grade.
Class Notes:
In A Quick Edit section:
Original:
Due to the fitness industry being built on deceit, our youth’s future is being jeopardized by these false “influencers.” Our kids are in imminent physical and mental harm due to the spread of misinformation and the intentional advertisement of dangerous substances.
Edited:
Phony Fitness influencers jeopardize our youths physical and mental health by peddling dangerous substances.
Relating to the nuclear power essay, it was great writing, but it can be proven wrong. The writer never mentions that nuclear power is cheaper. He only mentions it reduces greenhouse gas emissions, but doesn’t talk about any other gas and only gives one piece of evidence. Herbert used the disaster of Fukushima and the Mexico oil spill and says it’s unimaginable and relates that to nuclear power disasters. That is like saying you are bound to get hurt in a car because of car accidents. The plants that exist now can be moved to better places to reduce the result of disasters.
* Causality is bidirectional.
* There are is very clear difference between active verbs and passive verbs. Active verbs are direct and tell “who” does “what.” Passive verbs are very passive and they don’t say “who” did “what”
* Active verbs are better in writing. Avoid being passive.
* You can add introductory phrases and add whatever you want later as long as you have the first thing you want
* You can start with the simplest claim and then add to it
* A powerful claim that is refuted and can lose its creditability can be your strongest ally
* If the author of a source stacks the deck, all you have to do is steal from the other side. Nitpick at what the author of the source is saying/what they are missing from their work and you should be fine. You can also name the things that you have in your deck
Everything happens for a reason is a riddle about fate and how fate affects the decisions we make and the way we think.
Examine your paragraphs and sentences for better formation of sentences and find better verbs, nouns, etc that can be used to enhance your statements and their meaning to the reader.
Break down sentences
In your rebuttal unit you want a source that is very hard to refute against, you want a strong, clear argument to help your cause.
Embrace these strong arguments, they make your look that much more convincing when you take them down.
Looks for rebuttal opportunities
Insufficient evidence shouldn’t be mentioned because it just causes confusion and never reaches a satisfactory level with people. Which is not a good thing when you’re trying to convince someone on your points.
Don’t just choose the evidence that supports your position to make it seem you are looking at a topic from one side, instead use some evidence from the opposite side and use it in your argument. Make sure the evidence you’re proposing is more powerful than the oppositions perspective.
– “Everything Happens for a Reason”
– #1- Does the quote indicate fate?: No, I do not believe this indicated fate because it was a normal car crash he survived. He declared that the car crash just happened because it was meant to.
– #2 Yes, I believe that this is fate because she states that she connects with her life and family and decides to stop her bad decisions
– #3 Yes, I believe this indicates fate because he was touched by the hand of god and feels guilty even though he has never talked to Kay’s daughter.
– #4 No, I do not think this shows fate because they only started a program to help better educate since Zed believes Jay is an irresponsible driver.
– Taking out of passive will help shape up your openings/ statements: “is being jeopardized by”
– Practice sentence: Influencers are destroying the future of our youth by filling the fitness industry with deceit.
– Never lose the core of the argument. Build on front and back, but you gotta figure out what your sentence is first
– Use your favorite source to find other sources for your papers
Rebuttal Unit a
– It’s to find and refute the strongest counter-arguments you can find
– You want the guy that scares you to death. You might question yourself how in the world are you going to refute this
– Find a refutation argument you can kill. If you can do so, you win
– Avoid Insufficient Evidence Rebuttal
– It means you will never be satisfied
-Work on rebuttal argument, due Monday night
– Work on the two take-home assignments
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11/17
Do we have choices? We try to make good decisions but it depends on everything that happens before and how it impacts us.
Take writing out of a passive voice. Don’t lose the core of the sentence, make the argument the center. Build on the subject and verb. Readers will most likely skim the first few sentences, make sure they make the argument clear.
Rebuttal unit – 3rd short argument due next Tuesday
Form- Don’t just make claims of your own, find a refute counter argument.
Use a counter argument that has quality and comes from a good source.
Saying an argument has insufficient evidence is not a strong rebuttal. Offer good evidence to create the rebuttal.
Irrelevant evidence rebuttal- pointing out the evidence supports a different conclusion that the author’s argument.
Stacking the deck- overwhelms the evidence on the other side, a rebuttal might name more benefits of a subject than the original argument led their readers to believe.
False analogy- comparing two ideas that don’t really make sense together. Saying two things that are unpredictable like a hurricane and a nuclear meltdown don’t mean they have the same likeness of occurrence
Flase Choice- Usually follows a false analogy. There can be a third choice the author of the argument did not give.
“everything happens for a reason”: could mean that it’s goal orientated, or that previous circumstances led to it. Is fate predetermined? Cause then I wouldn’t believe in it. But if fate is just the idea that whatever happens happens, then I could get behind that.
Workshop: Passive language hides your passion. examine your content and look for better verbs. Instead of “is” or “are” you could use words like “deceive” and “jeopardizing”.
“Due to the deceitful fitness industry, influencers jeopardize our youth’s future with misinformation and dangerous substances that harm their physical and mental well being.”
Sources: if you cant find sources, you might be searching a little too specifically. You can find ideas that tie into your paper without having the same subject.
Rebuttal Unit: Pick the rebuttal that scares you. If you can disprove the most solid evidence against you, then you win the argument. Providing that good evidence is an effective rebuttal.
A strong opponent can be your biggest ally.
Post the rebuttal argument early in order to get better feedback.
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“Everything happens for a reason”
The circumstances pushed us towards this
Belief in fate
All of our decisions are dependent on who we are and what has happened to us
We don’t have any choice but to make that choice
Phony fitness influencers destroy the health of our youth by shilling for the makers of steroids and their synthetics
Look for the source that goes against what you are arguing
One effective rebuttal is having better evidence then your opponent
Pointing out that their evidence leads to a different conclusion
Demonstrating that a correct interpretation of the evidence proves something other then what the author is saying
“Everything happens for a reason” If that reason for the happening of everything is fate, what concern does fate have with my ankle itching right now? Is it fate that I used my left foot to scratch my right ankle? Is it part of the plan?
Once you have the subject and verb, build on the idea. Without obscuring the meaning, cover it in words that defend the meaning of paths that would lead to misinterpretation with words that act to strengthen the idea as well.
Claiming that evidence is insufficient is useless. Provide information that causes most people to come to the conclusion in your favor rather than the opposition’s.
Find logical fallacies. A writer may overlook these. Weirdly similar to actual physical conflict, fighting is not about who can hit harder, it’s about who can use the other’s imperfections against them. Find where the opposition slips up and move in on it. Your goal as a writer, or someone in an argument, is to make sure that your position (like actual conflict) is not able to be breached. Write what you mean, make sure you can’t interpret it any other way. Of course, you could learn you are wrong through argument; one of these positions must be incorrect or less correct than the other. At least one of the people in the argument will learn something, either by research or having the information of the opposition presented to them (in a scholarly manner, not casually or in conversation).
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Magical Dependancies
Riddle
“Everything Happens For a Reason”
No belief in fate, but there is a belief that the car accident was a result of reckless driving
Belief in fate, she was able to rekindle her relationship with her family because of her accident
Belief in fate, he believes that God has a plan for him
Belief in fate, Dee believes that it’s fate that allowed them to become successful
A Quick Edit
Active verbs can give your paper a much needed kick. It places blame on the subject
Passive verbs hide the identity of the actor. They obscure identity
Strengthen the core of your argument and never lose sight of it
Sources Unit
If you come across a paywall, try an alternative site
You can find new sources from previous sources
Rebuttal Unit
The goal is to find someone who looks difficult to refute
Pick the rebuttal that scares you the most
If you are able to counter the strongest evidence against you, you will win the argument
The Rebuttal Argument is due on November 22
College Composition 2
11/17/22
Class Notes
Riddle About Fate
I believe Jays accident was not fate. This is because the Father asks Jay what happened suggesting Jay did something to cause the accident and not fate causing the accident.
Kay shows a belief in fate because the accident caused her to reconnect with family and old friends; even Kay suggesting she would stop her irresponsible behavior.
Jay shows a belief in fate, but in a negative way. Instead of realizing Jay can shape his fate and life he would rather just settle for the lazy irresponsible answer which is “things happen to me because god wants them to happen to me” this shows he is not willing to take action against problems thrown at Jay by fate.
Zed shows a belief in fate because Zed’s son was really irresponsible and Zed said to himself he would not raise his daughter Dee the same way. From this Zed to the action and belief to change his parenting methods with his daughter and started to make good money on a business they created together. Zed shows fate by believing if he parented Dee differently she would not be like Jay.
Source Workshop
Academic sources are way more useful than popular sources as they offer a deeper dive into the subject as well as sophisticated vocabulary that can be helpful to use whe writing about your subject.
First thing you wanna do is examine your sources to see if they are a good academic source or popular source.
While looking for sources look for signal phrases that can connect you to your topic.
Be sure when looking for sources to use google scholar or Rowan Campbell Library database to look for efficient and safe sources for your topic.
Insufficient evidence rebuttal- It’s not effective to ask the author for more evidence. That is, providing good evidence is an effective rebuttal.
Irrelevant evidence rebuttal- It is not an effective rebuttal to complain that you really don’t see what the evidence provided has to do with the argument.Pointing out that the evidence supports a different conclusion than the author’s is an effective rebuttal.
Inconclusive evidence rebuttal- It can never be an effective rebuttal to say that the evidence provided doesn’t quite add up to a proof. Demonstrating how a correct interpretation of the evidence proves something other than the author’s argument is an effective rebuttal.
Stack the Deck Rebuttal-It is not an effective rebuttal to say that the author is unfair to your side of the argument and should offer evidence to support your position.You could say in the case for A Price Too High? ; Bob Herbert acts as if the only benefit we obtain from nuclear power is reduced greenhouse gas emissions.
Class Notes:
-All of our decisions are what lead us to it.
– Instead of “is” or “are” try to find other verbs. Make use of the most active verbs and make it the center of your sentence.
– Make a bold claim and make it the first sentence.
– Use google scholar for sources, look for within your topic which might lead to different articles that can help support your essay.
– Rebuttal unit:
Look for the strongest refute there is in your topic.
– Types of Rebuttal:
1. Insufficient evidence ( I will never be convinced because it needs better evidence.)
2. Irrelevant evidence ( why the evidence does not lead to conclusion.)
3. Stacking the deck ( you choose the evidence that supports your point of view.)
4. False analogy ( predictions based on close comparisons.)
5. False choice ( giving fake choices instead of looking at the obvious.)
11/17
With the riddle it was about fate “Everything Happens for a Reason” The real question is does that quote indicate a belief in fate? In my opinion being an anime fan, fate is talked about in 95% of all anime shows. That there’s a purpose of what we are living and that we have no control of it and what happens just happens.
In scenario 1 is not a belief in fate at all Jay was the reason for the accident it’s no one else’s will doing he had control over that.
In scenario 2 is not a belief because Kay has control over her actions and being in the hospital bed are the results of that. Her wanting to change herself for the future is up to her.
In scenario 3 there is belief in fate because Jay believes everything is God’s doing and he doesn’t have any control over what happens.
In scenario 4 isn’t a belief in fate because everything was in Zed’s control with creating the organization.
11/17 Class Notes
This does not indicate a belief in fate. It is being used as a way to make Jay feel better for his careless actions.
This can indicate a belief in fate. Following Kay’s careless actions, she experiences pain and suffering that teaches her to appreciate the life she is given.
This indicates that Jay believes that his fate rests in God’s hands, so it does indicate a level of belief. He just puts all of it in the hands of others rather than changing for the better.
Dee saying this may indicate that she believes that their success was due to fate, but in reality it was caused by hard working people.
Original: Due to the fitness industry being built on deceit, our youth’s future is being jeopardized by these false “influencers.” Our kids are in imminent physical and mental harm due to the spread of misinformation and the intentional advertisement of dangerous substances.
Edited: Forged influencers paint a picture of false expectations, that cause physical and mental harm on our youth.
Sources Workshop: different ways to access sources
There are different take-home exercises to complete:
Magic Dependency, Editing for Logic, and Rebuttal Argument
instead of is or are try to find other verbs.
Use more active verbs and make the center of your sentence
Do a bold claim and make it the first sentence
Use google scholar for sources and look for within your topic so you can fine different articles that can help support your essay
For rebuttal unit make sure you look for the strongest refute in your topic
There is 5 different types of rebuttal:
1.insufficient evidence
2.irrelevant evidence
3.stacking the deck
4.false analogy
5.False choice