20 Class THU NOV 10
Counterintuitive Narratives
The Definition of a Kilogram
- The Definition is about to Change
- “If Le Grand K gets heavier or lighter — or absorbs atoms of something from the air — the definition of the kilogram literally changes. Scientists believe something like this has been happening, because Le Grand K seems to now weigh slightly less than its official copies.”
- “The originators of the metric system based it on the globe itself, with the meter described as one 10-millionth of the distance from the North Pole to the equator. But, for a long time, the meter was literally a metal bar in France. As physics advanced, says Schlamminger, scientists were able to ditch the metal bar and define the meter in terms of the distance that light can travel through a vacuum in about one 300-millionth of a second.”
The U.S. National Institute of Standards and Technology in Maryland has its own copy of Le Grand K — a platinum-iridium kilogram known as K92.
The New Kilogram is based on Planck’s constant
Now, after researchers spent years creating an elaborate new kind of weighing machine called a Kibble balance, it’s finally the kilogram’s turn. In the future, to see whether a hunk of metal really weighs 1 kilogram, it won’t have to get flown to France and compared with Le Grand K. It can be evaluated in this type of instrument, using Planck’s constant.”
.The Consequence of Perfect Attendance Awards
- Perfect Attendance Awards
- The Study
- As states and districts struggle to prevent chronic absenteeism, rewarding students for
attendance has been seen as low-hanging fruit—California even requires it by law.
In a forthcoming study previewed at the annual Society for Research on Educational
Effectiveness meeting in Washington last week, researchers found that older students who received recognition certificates were actually less likely to continue going to school every day than students who received nothing at all.
- As states and districts struggle to prevent chronic absenteeism, rewarding students for
Followup Report: Natural Language
In-Class Workshop:
Let’s work on this paragraph together.
Vancouver has a huge problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can in stopping the addicts. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin, it will only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. The programs main focus is the high crime rates caused by heroin users. Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day activities such as jobs and social interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because they are using. Due to their addiction, users will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. Commonly committed crimes include breaking and entering and stealing. By providing the drug in a safe way, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible, and in turn will fix the city crime rate but not the addiction that these people face.
Preview Rhetoric Unit:
(Prepare for Class TUE NOV 15)
- Rhetoric for Refutation
- Includes In-Class Rhetoric Exercise
- Located in Lectures/Revision/Revision—Rhetoric
- Due in class today
- Revision—Rhetoric and Scholarship
- Use Reply on one of your posts to identify a paragraph we will use for Rhetoric workshop.
- Due in class today
Sources Unit—
(Prepare for Class TUE NOV 15)
- Sources Workshop Number 2
- Responsive to Student X’s trouble finding academic sources
- Located in Course Documents/Research Tips/Sources Workshop
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
-the weight of a kilogram was based off of one day, weighing a certain amount and that was decided that it was a kilogram.
-it is not constant, having lost about the weight of an eyelash
-praising perfect attendance makes people not want to go to class.
-students realize that the only thing that separates them from those who are absent versus those who are present is a sheet of paper
-describe things you see, not specifics like color, but appearance and what impression it leaves with us
-nothing occurs on accident, everything has a purpose
-Complete Portfolio task of a 30 second video and analyze it
-video opens with an overhead shot of a cutting board in yellowish brown shades, on a darker brown wooden table. The board has never been used before
-you can not include the title on it, or the time of the video because none of that is included in the actual film
-no sound, mute video
-bold white letters pop up saying “1 bunch of ______”
-include link of video
These seem useful.
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Definition of Kilogram is changing- the one kilogram weight is the weight determined to be a kilogram
The original kilogram has lost about 50 micrograms, so now the weight of the kilogram is less, which means that it is not consistent.
Planck’s constant – makes it so that whatever physical form a measurement takes, is turned into a formula so it stays consistent
Things we couldn’t believe change — do
Visual rhetoric argument- not based on word count, ex. Thai life insurance video
Prevent using the title to describe the video
Watch video muted first
Go through each second and try and describe as much as possible
Common advice- add more detail
Visualize and understand how the details impose interpretations on the viewers
What the writer believes the details interpret
These were perhaps useful when writing your Visual assignment.
3/3
A kilogram is not the standard measurement in the United States but is in other parts of the world. A kilogram was described as the mass of a liter of water. It is crazy to say that because to get the mass of water you need to place it into an object to hold it which would also influence the mass.
The fact that the physical object is described as a kilogram and the fact that a kilogram now is less than what it was before. It is interesting how the based of a kilogram is based on the conversion of 1/10,000,000 which is calculated from the equator to the top.
Planck’s constant which was talked about in class has the definition which is the equivalence of mass and energy. This still confuses me but this caused me to want to know the definition is for it.
The next type of argument that we will be working on that will be due next week is the visual rhetoric argument. In this argument, we will be using an Ad council video which is nice and short and you can time-stamp them when making your arguments. When watching the video it must be muted because we are describing the visual, not the verbal descriptions.
In the videos that were created by the ad council, they have thought through every second and what is shown on the screen.
You have confused the definition of a meter with the definition of a kilogram.
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2 more short arguments left for portfolio tasks.
1 left for the 3,000 word essay.
Rhetoric argument will consist of an examination of a 30 second video.
Select any 30-second video you like from the library of Ad Council PSAs and use it to produce your own visual analysis.
A non-formal piece of rhetorical writing will format as notes on a second-by-second basis with time stamps.
Post will go into two categories: “Visual” and “Visual rewrite.”
Argument is part of portfolio grade.
If readers cannot easily visualize things or scenes you are describing, revise your work.
Not quite: Post will go into two categories: “Visual” and “Visual rewrite.”
—That would mean one post in two categories.
—Reality is two posts, one in each category.
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– The school study on perfect attendance is a great counterintuitive example because people would think that it would increase students attendance to class. However, the students started showing up less. I found that very interesting and relatable because back in elementary school we had a perfect attendance award for not missing a day the whole year. I would strive to get it but would miss a day for being sick or something like that. As soon as that happens, I would care about attendance a lot less, and began taking off school for much smaller reasons because I had no reason to attend.
– While looking at the example of the visual rhetoric assignment, it was almost overwhelming processing so much information from just one second of the ad council “now”. There are so many details that you can catch if you are really paying attention and focusing. While looking at empty plates it was a lot harder to analyze. As soon as the “1 bunch of _______”, a large list of possibilities arise. The blank can be filled with anything from food to pencils to any object. This leaves a lot to the audience’s imagination because nothing is definitive. Finely chopped gave even more information because it doesn’t look like anything is there but if it is still left to our imagination then it narrows it down to food, specifically vegetables. The person in the ad could still be cutting something because their hand is covering whatever they are doing. Once, it says season to taste, however, the message becomes a lot clearer because they are seasoning nothing, which seems very confusing at first but you soon realize that they purposely showing nothing. As the ad goes on they continue taking cooking steps on nothing and you further realize that they are not showing endless cooking possibilities, but rather one cooking possibility: an empty plate which a lot of people have. At the end they confirm this by clearly writing it “an empty plate means an empty stomach” and “take action to end world hunger.” The ad definitely makes you feel the depressing feeling of having nothing which for a lot of us is hard to imagine. That plate is usually filled with food for us, and all an empty plate means to us is something waiting to have food put on it. However, the ad shows us that empty had something already put onto it: nothing. Eye opening.
– This is just a side note – grammar and vocab on notes might slightly be off because I am just writing down my thoughts all in succession without thinking on what the grammar of each sentence is. I apologize for that. But this enables me to write all my thoughts down without forgetting it.
I like your Notes, NF. Don’t worry about grammar. Keep chronicling your impressions, if they’re useful and you want to remember them.
4/3
My Notes:
Counterintuitive notes: Definition of a Kilogram and a new kilogram. Attendance, does it have the desired effect or the opposite outcome? Through the study done in California, the attendance was worse due to this. Wouldn’t you think an incentive or some ‘reward’ coming from this would cause a better attendance.
Visual Rhetoric: Within a video or advertisement, so much information can be broken down just from one frame within a second. Such as the examples given in this class and the previous classes. Example done in class to help understand more thoroughly how to do assignments. Which actually helped me understand more detail within a frame and how to decipher it. The more detail the better, colors may not be as important, but the message that contributes to the overall videos.
Good Note about the “message that contributes.”
3/3
– during the visual rhetoric, look don’t hear
– how are things arranged?
– color, mise en scene, composition
– “read” into it
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– try not to use the titles
3/3
We are given that the footage is real
Get sense of scene in the first second
Always a morale and an argument
Call to action is always present
How much detail is enough?
Enough detail that the reader can visualize the basics and understand how the details imposed
Refute a highly credible persons point of view
Reader thinks you are smarter on the topic
Very nice.
4/3
We discussed the definition of what a kilogram is. I have learned that it is an actual physical object, used to describe a kilogram. There were many copies made of this object, used to distinguish what is the weight of a kilogram. I always thought it was simply a unit of measurement we use but it is a physical object. And also it now weighs less than it used to, weight is strange because isn’t a kilogram a constant? We then talked about perfect attendance awards. I remember I have only had perfect attendance once in all my years of school, in 3rd grade. All my friends and I made a goal to all try and be in perfect attendance, and we did it. Why was it considered such a praised achievement? We even had an article in our local newspaper of us with our certificates. Because we were going to school to get an education, shouldn’t we do that regardless of the praise. Visual Rhetoric has also been discussed again, which I am familiar with as we have discussed this before. And talked about details, and how much detail is too much detail. And discussed the specifications of our next visual rhetoric assignment. We reviewed another example from the Ad council. In this example it was for the foundation called Feeding America. A video regarding empty plates meaning empty stomachs, and we went through second by second describing in extreme detail what was happening.
Thanks for the anecdote, Reeses.
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44Elk 4/4/22 In-Class Notes:
I walked into class 7 minutes late today. I really dislike that result. I’ll try better next morning.
I walked in during a discussion about what a Kilogram is measured, based on an international standard. We also looked at the meter standard that’s represented by a metal bar that’s been duplicated and distributed.
Next, we looked at the integrity of Perfect-Attendance awards.
Next, we looked at our next Portfolio Assignment. It has to do with visual rhetoric, and it’s due before next Monday’s class. We practiced by hyper-analyzing the visual and rhetorical aspects of a 30-second ad in class. I also learned that the Visual Rhetoric Rewrite has the same weight as each of the 1000 word essays in the Portfolio category.
Next, we looked at a sample of refutation/rebuttal writing. We both praised it and critiqued its effectiveness.
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1 liter of H2O used to = 1 kg, what we think of as dependent on nature was actually dependent on a physical object. The kilogram weighs less than it used to. Now the kg is defined as the speed light travels in 1/300,000,000 sec. It is now defined as a constant, it can no longer fluctuate.
Do perfect attendance awards improve attendance? Surprisingly, no. It actually has the reverse effect.
In the visual rhetoric assignment describe the impression that you receive from the imagery rather than just listing off what you see.
As long as the details are important to the argument add as much as possible.
Common knowledge is not an effective thing to argue against, identify a strong argument against your own.
Yes.
3/3
You might expect that a perfect attendance award would be beneficial for students who accomplish perfect attendance
Perfect attendance has a reverse effect on students
Your causal argument and your causal rewrite is supposed to be posted together
Required to use an ad council video because they are an argument.
It is important to use enough detail so that the reader can understand the video.
You have to decide whether the ad worked in getting its point across, and how effective it was.
Be sure to include a link to the video so that you can see what we are talking about
Use rhetorical analysis to explain what is going on in the ad
Only the rewrite will go into the portfolio, so the edited best version will go.
We want to find the best argument we can that would risk sabotaging our own, and cut its legs out.
Love that last sentence.
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-The originators of the metric system based it on the globe itself, with the meter described as one 10-millionth of the distance from the North Pole to the equator.
-Effectiveness meeting in Washington last week, researchers found that older students who received recognition certificates were actually less likely to continue going to school every day than students who received nothing at all.
-The ad starts very abruptly in the middle of a scene. What’s more, in the first second, the camera is zooming quickly back so that we have to adjust immediately to a barrage of information. The suggestion the filmmakers are making is that the footage was captured by an amateur camera operator, either for home video or maybe a low-budget documentary.
-As you describe the visuals in depth, use your rhetorical skills to encourage an interpretation in the minds of your readers. They are putty in your hands since they depend on you for both your report on the images
-Rewrites are always encouraged and necessary, but sometimes they’re also actually assigned and required. The Visual Rewrite is an assigned rewrite, with its own category, cleverly named: Visual Rewrite.
Effective copy/paste technique, provided these are selected by usefulness, not randomly.
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The Definition of a Kilogram
Le Grand K is sometimes heavier or lighter because it can absorb or lose atoms thus altering the true weight.
A relatively new mechanism called a kibble balance is the most optimal way to get an accurate weight of an object.
The Consequences of Perfect Attendance Award
Giving kids perfect attendance awards makes going to school less beneficial in the eyes of others.
Visual Rhetoric
When rewriting a visual analysis, add more detail, as it is vital.
Allows the viewer to visualize the situation.
Rhetoric Refutation
Mention and respond to your best critic.
This will allow you to further explain your point and rebuttal weak points in their argument, thus making you look more credible on the topic.
I like the Rebuttal description.
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04/04/2022
A kilogram is used everywhere else except for America and it was defined as 1 liter. The definition later changed and a kilogram was referred to as a metal object that was kept in safety.
A certificate was sent to students that had perfect attendance and results showed that the students ended up not coming to classes instead of keeping up with perfect attendance which is shocking.
In class, we discussed the portfolio assignment on visual rhetoric which is based on a 30-second ad. There has to be a link to the video provided and each scene has to be discussed in detail in a timestamp format. The location of the scene should be provided as well as the point of view, and budget for the video to be taken. Other details to include are emotions, quality, race, religion, wardrobe, hand gestures, and point of view. There should be no description of the title but any text that is included can be used. Explaining why the director choose these logos, ethos, and pathos aspects to be included in the ads
When the visual rhetoric assignment is complete at the bottom write a small paragraph about the impact, effectiveness, and shortcoming of the video.
Good.
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11/10 Class Notes
Anything can be redefined, even measurements that we think to be true
This applies to our definitions as well
“Due to the fact” to “because”
In-Class Workshop: can shift the first three sentences of the paragraph to become only one sentence with the same information.
Vancouver’s “free heroin for addicts” program may stop addicts from robbing, burglarizing, mugging, and prostituting themselves to support their habits, but it won’t ween them from heroin.
The program’s focus is to reorient addicts from crime, disease, and ill-health to functioning members of society.
By providing the drug in a safe way, the program gets addicts off the streets, which in turn will reduce the crime rate.
This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible, avoiding contamination, overdose, emergency room visits, and death, but will not eliminate addiction.
Next up on Portfolio–Rhetoric
CounterIntuitive Narratives
The units of measurement (inches, feet, yards) remain the same, the way we actually measure is what changes
Not all human feet are the same meaning using a foot to measure a foot is unreliable
A yard stick itself becomes the measurement
The metal object weighs a kilogram because it is the original kilogram. A kilogram is the weight of the object.
The metal object will still be a kilogram no matter what it weighs
They held a vote to redefine the kilogram
Anything can be redefined
Your new definition should be celebrated
Followup Report: Natural Language
“Due to the fact” can be replaced with just “because”
Don’t wait to explain things in your paper. You don’t want to make your reader wait
“Negatively Impacted” doesn’t say anything. We don’t know what it means exactly
Don’t backtrack in your papers
In-Class Workshop
We don’t need to waste words establishing that something is a problem if we are just going to come out and say what the problem is
Get rid of “by” language
The trap is that the phrase “By providing the drug in a safe way,” you expect an explanation
Who does the providing?
Rhetoric
The In Class Assignments may be put on hold just make sure to look over them
The next 1,000 word argument will be due November 22
We’re not looking for a mere contradiction
We need to find an actual opponent and obliterate them
Find what makes them doubt your position
We need to recognize what is in their mind already
They have good reason to doubt us. We chose our point of view because its controversial
We have to find what objection they have and tear it down
Brilliant Notes, xephos!
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Class Notes-
Anything can be redefined. Science can change the definition of weight so we can change the definition of a word
“Negatively impacted” is bad. It doesn’t actually describe anything. Avoid this in writing.
If you have a good blanket statement you don’t want to spend the next few sentences backtracking
In class workshop:
Vancouver paragraph can be written in a few concise sentences
“Vancouver’s “free heroin for addicts” program may stop addicts from burglarizing, and prostitution to support their habits, but it wont ween them from heroin. The program’s focus is to reorient addicts from crime disease and ill-health to jobs and healthy social relationships. By providing the drug in a safe way, the program gets addicts off the streets which in turn will reduce crime rate. Harm reduction is its stated goal.
“By” language demands who is providing. Avoid starting the sentences with it unless you plan to say who is doing the providing.
Rhetoric for Refutation-
You are not writing a direct contradiction to your thesis. It is not for fair and balanced coverage.
We do need to address the other sides of the argument. Find opponent, take out their knees.
What makes someone doubt what I am saying? Our readers will have an idea of their own, recognize the prejudices that keeps them from acknowledging how much better my argument is.
Start by identifying your critics. Acknowledge they have some valid points.
11/10
Professor talked about the speed of light
We went over “The Definition of Kilogram”
The new Kilogram is based on Planck’s
Create a new unique definition of constant
We went over and revised the short paragraph about Vancouver
Including the specific crimes they state that seem to happen in Vancouver would be a lot more helpful
Went over Rhetoric for the Refutation assignment
– If our claims are consistent throughout our work, our definition will always be clear. – It will never be in question.
– We should be looking to aim for unique but universally constant definitions when we write.
– Don’t ever use the word “impact”.” It holds no value as it doesn’t describe anything.
– There is no value to “preview” a claim before actually discussing it.
– Avoid “By” language. Using “By” can put you in a trap.
– Recognize the “extra fat” in my work and remove it, to increase its quality.
– In my refutation essay, my job is not to write a good contradiction to my own argument, instead we must acknowledge that there are people on the other side that we must contradict.
– Recognize what’s in our “opponents” mind already. Battle the prejudices of the room.
-Figure out someone’s objection, then cut it down to size.
– Unmask the false analogies that our readers are making.
Definitions change frequently. The distance from the north pole to the equator used to be the length of a meter. Weight is based on gravity, which varies at different places. Your weight at the top of a very high mountain may be different than it is at your house. Anything can be redefined so when we are unsure whether or not we should create a new definition of a word, we should let go of our fears because this is done all of the time.
It turns out that rewarding people for perfect attendance actually causes them to come to school less. When they realize that they are showing up on time every single day but receive no to little recognition, they feel taken advantage of and as if they have room to slack off. The solution to this issue would be to punish those who are absent instead of praising those who are not.
We should try to leave replies to posts in the earlier section of the comments, because the lower the comments get, the more often they are repeats of one another. We should formulate our own responses first, then read our classmates’ and make any alterations we can without plagiarizing.
It is important we cut the filler phrases such as “it is” and “this is.” We should also transition from one topic to another fluently, without being sidetracked along the way and returning to it five sentences later. In order to do so, we should be careful never to repeat ourselves more than once.
Our refutation argument will be due soon. We should not attempt to contradict our own argument in these essays. We should make a rebuttal argument through signal phrases and respect towards the divergent viewpoint.
Class Notes 11/10
The definition of a kilogram has changed. This helps illustrate that how we define the terms for our arguments is important. If we do not define our terms and how they are meant to be portrayed or else others may misunderstand the work we are trying to prove. The new definition needs to be universally constant and unique.
There is no value in stating something and making the claim after.
By language is problematic because it sets us up for the question of who is doing the providing.
In the refutation argument, we need to establish the objecting views. This will help us know what information to provide in order to persuade readers that our theory is right. The primary job is to find the prejudice that keeps readers from accepting the value of our argument. The point isn’t to just state that your argument is right and the other is wrong but instead provide the evidence to change people’s opinions.
When crediting the opposing view to a group of people, using the word “critics” give credit to everyone who disagrees with your argument.
In-Class Workshop
– The writer presented the problem then answered it right away
– Committing crimes is the problem and stopping them is the solution
– Do not use the word “by” because then “I” or “We” would have to be next and who will have to be provided. Start with the providing
Rewrite:
Vancouver’s “free heroin for addicts” program may stop addicts from robbing,
burglarizing, mugging, and prostituting themselves to support their habits, but it won’t ween them from heroin. The program’s focus is to reorient addicts from crime, disease, and ill-health to jobs and healthy social relationships. By providing the drug in a safe way, the program gets addicts off the streets, which in turn will reduce the crime rate. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible, avoiding contamination, overdose, emergency room visits, death, and will free up parking spaces, but will not eliminate addiction.
– Rhetoric for Refutation, the writer will go against a topic such as everyone should marry and have children. The opposing side of that is that men and women shouldn’t get married and shouldn’t have children.
– Readers come to us with their minds already made up and a writer has to find that. The writer has to answer the reader’s objection.
-Anything can be redefined. We can make our own definitions.
-Perfect attendance awards are counterintuitive. In an attempt to reward perfect attendance students, the reward is not impressive enough for the perfect attendance students and would actually result in these students skipping more classes later on.
-Don’t preview what you are going to state. Ex: Don’t say there is a problem and continue to talk about something that is already seen as a problem.
-if trying to emphasize a problem, describe the actions that make it a problem.
-don’t say “main focus.” There can’t be the main focus because a focus is one thing. If you have more than one then it isn’t a focus anymore.
-when rewording paragraphs, go big or go home. If you can break down 4 sentences into 1 then good, do it. Getting rid of redundant sentences will help keep readers interested.
-The refutation argument is not to write about a good contradiction to our argument.
-Identify the prejudices that prevent the reader from seeing your perspective of the argument.
-cut these prejudices down to size in the refutation argument.
Notes:
– For our warm-up, we learned that the definition of a kilogram is changing. It’s a reminder that anything can be redefined.
– Looking back at Natural Language, we could see the many ways to reduce unnecessary phrasing in a paragraph. Try not to be vague while rewriting paragraphs.
– When revising a paragraph, be careful not to repeat information. Using the right wording, you can provide a lot more information than you think in a single sentence. If information is missing, you can add it in after making revisions.
– The refutation argument is used to address the other sides of your thesis and contradict them. It is not to come up with the best counterargument. Find out the prejudices readers may have against your argument, and use it to your advantage to convince them. Acknowledge a critic’s perspective before providing a rebuttal.
Anything can be redefined, no matter what it is. So you can relax if you believe that you can’t define something that’s already defined
We don’t need to try to add adjectives to our claims when there is no need for it. Ex. “Huge problem” can just be turned into “problem”
Don’t start off the sentence by saying “by”, it doesn’t clarify who is doing what the sentence is trying to claim
Try to get into the habit of taking away that “extra skin” from your writing.
We aren’t looking for you to contradict your own argument.
You have to find an actual opponent and to obliterate that opponent
Our job is to recognize what is in our reader’s mind already and what they are objecting with
College Composition 2
Class Notes
Kilograms’ new definition is the planck constant, h.
My Other Revised Version: Vancouver has a problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is trying to stop addicts from robbing, mugging, burglarizing, and prostitution by giving them free heroin. This in return will drop the crime rate, but will not help addicts kick their addiction.
Second Part of the revised: The program’s main focus is to reorient addicts from crime, disease, and ill-health to jobs and healthy social relationships.
Third Part: By providing the drug in a safeway, the program gets addicts off the streets, which in turn will reduce the crime rate.
Fourth Part: This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible, avoiding contamination, overdose, emergency room visits, death, and will free up parking spaces, but will not eliminate addiction.
It is hard to see the flak of your own essays, but if you reread and make sure you go into detail correctly then there will be no flak in your essay.
We will have a refutation review for two days next week. It will be November 15th.(1000 words)
A rhetorical refutation is answering your opponent’s problem with your argument.
Recognize your readers’ prejudice and attack it as honestly as possible.
There’s always 50 other points of view or objections. You need to identify these objections like prejudices and attack them until you can honestly win the argument and sway them to your side.
We can indicate with signal phrases that we’re making a rebuttal argument without directly signaling “the biggest refutation to my hypothesis”
Read rhetoric refutation, revision rhetoric and scholarship, as well as source workshop 2.
The Definition of a Kilogram
Anything can be redefined. We don’t have to fold to the old constructs of what is already accepted when we can create a definition that will better suit our writing.
Vancouver In-Class Workshop
Free Heroin for Addicts strives to give addicts a clean source, not in hopes of mending the addicts’ personal life, but to ensure the safety of citizens who are in harm’s way when a user’s itching for a fix.
(I seem to have a cynical view compared to my classmates when doing these activities. I like the idea of the program itself, but for some reason whenever I write about this my tone is cynical.)
Get ready for the refutation argument.
* The distance light travels through a vacuum in 1/300,000,000 of a second
* Reminder: You can be over academic with the wording of your papers
* Be more specific with your words when writing. Avoid being vague
* There is no value is previewing a claim. There is more value in being specific
* The “by…” language in sentences sets up a trap. The sentences
* The “free heroin for addicts” program is a real thing, and it’s for people that have failed rehab a number of times.
* It’s not easy to find the fluff in an paragraph, but it is critical when wiring and editing
* Your job when writing is not to write a contradiction to your opinion. We’re not spending 1000 words on a balanced understanding of the topic
* When writing, you have to find an opponent and you have to obliterate said opponent
* You’re job in the refutation argument is to find the arguments that people
* Figure out the refutation and cut it down to size
* Identify the people who don’t want to agree with you as critics
* Words like granted, are accommodating. It’s like you’re meeting someone halfway with their argument
Notes
Definitions you create in your essays aren’t exactly permanent, if you feel there is a better way to define something as you write try to redefine it.
Things often change as you write so don’t be scared of that change, embrace it and make it work in favor of your final paper.
Some things that we feel will make a difference to a result may actually worsen the original situation, for example perfect attendance awards can make children actually miss more school because all their working for is a paper and it is no longer a moral obligation. Situations like this can occur in your writing so if something you’re doing isn’t working just take it out and try again.
Always read over your work to see if there are lengthy paragraphs that can be reduced to one sentence.
Rewrite sentence: Addicts depend on drugs so highly that they will do essentially anything to get their hands on it therefore this program aims from stopping this in dangerous and malicious crimes related to this through happening by providing them with the drug
Keep putting stuff in feedback please, it makes professor happy
Refute arguments dont write a good contradiction to your argument, instead write about what controversies and opinions might be against our argument and address them.We have to recognize we are both reasonable for our opinions but then we have to contradict them to stress our points.
Signal phrases are inclusive in the idea that it is evident there is different ideas, include these to get the liking and favorable eyes of the audience specifically early on
In refute essays don’t necessarily say that “ they have bad ideas and i can prove it”, we can recognize standards and expectations of their argument and accommodate that but share your perspective with it in regards to your argument. This creates a nice middle ground which you want more in your favor than not.
Homework looks at the bottom of today’s agenda and looks through the links that say to look through, don’t do anything but being knowledgeable will help.
11/10
Definition of a Kilogram
– The definition of a kilogram is changing, there is one singular weight that defines all kilograms, as it inevitably loses weight over time, so will the definition of a kilogram
Vancouver Heroin Addicts
– Avoid being vague in describing something, and don’t vaguely describe something if you’re just going to define it specifically later
– Instead of describing something across an entire paragraph, be specific with your language and describe it all at once in an organized, confined manner
– Condense your paragraphs so you don’t lose your reader’s attention with clutter words
– Removing vague language leaves from for more precise illustrations to support your claim better
Refutation Argument
– This isn’t arguing against yourself, it is introducing and acknowledging the other side of your argument, but you still refute the opposing point, and refute their refutations
– The point is answering the objection of the audience, in turn further arguing your point
– You don’t need to say something like “this is the refutation to my argument,” instead introduce it like any other argument, acknowledge it, and refute
– A meter used to be defined as measuring the globe 1/10,000,000
– Meter Bar 27 became the new definition of a meter
– Le Grand K is a platinum- iridium kilogram known as K92
– The definition is Le Grand K so the copies in other states are wrong since they no longer weight the same
– The kilogram is now defined as Planck constant
– When you go through the trouble to create a term to meet your own terms, you are well in your rights to do so
– Just like how the definition of a kilogram can change, so can the meaning of your own words
– Students who received perfect attendance certificates were actually less likely to continue going to school after they were praised by a piece of paper
– Finished up natural language exercise and went over good examples within
– The main focus of Vancouvers “free heroin for addicts” program only focuses on high crime rate and not help adddicts stop injecting heroin
– We dont even need to say Vancouver has a problem, we know that robberies, muggings, and home and car break ins arent good
– Tuesday next week the 15th, we will be working on refutation
– Acknowledges that their are foolish people who do not believe in your proposal
– No matter how brillant your proposal is, people are prodigious
– Find a credible source and break down each of his points. Show your readers the strongest argument against yours, you can then crush it. Find flaws
– Look over links professor provided to get ready for class on the 15th
11/10
Kilogram Definition- even things we believe are universal constants can change in definition. The kilogram was always based on one Liter of water, then became how it relates to the Le Grand K, then it was based on Planks Constant.
Perfect attendance award- Did not promote attendance, didn’t give kids enough recognition and they felt like it didn’t really matter, created absenteeism where there wasn’t before.
Vancouver Addict Program workshop- Many sentences with repeated ideas can be formed into fewer or even one. Don’t say “there is a problem” and then explain it in another sentence, state the problem first.
Refutation is not to state the other side, it is to acknowledge that argument and refute it. Show the reader that the opposition evidence they believed is not good enough. Find flaws in the opposing argument and use them to your advantage. You should take the opposition seriously and acknowledge that some truth can be found in it, though it won’t hold up to your belief.
Definition of a Kilogram: One meter is 1/10,000,000th of the distance between the North Pole and the equator. The H stick became the new measurement for the meter. The earlier definition of a meter has been switched out into the distance light travels through a vacuum in 1/300,000,000 o f a second. The original kilogram does not way the same as it’s copies. The actual definition is about to change. You are in your rights as an author to tweak definitions for your paper.
Perfected attendance award: doesn’t actually promote perfect attendance.
(very sorry for being so sleepy in class, I’m not bored or uninterested, just extremely tired).
Vancouver Exercise: Make your claims from the beginning. It serves no point to wait until later in the paragraph. Make use of Independent/Dependent clauses (Although, Despite, While, etc). Being wordy is a crime, get to the point! Being specific is also super important, you don’t want your audience coming to a conclusion that you didn’t intend. The job of the writer is to challenge the readers objection.
Refutation: All about presenting opposing ideas, and then deconstructing them. If you destroy their argument, they can’t counter what you say.
Class Notes:
-Perfect attendance award does not promote perfect attendance.
-Deserves valuable consideration, but it does not.
– Class with perfect attendance vs non-perfect attendance:
Maybe certificate ? Still not enough are less likely to continue going to class.
-It maybe wasn’t for acknowledgement ,maybe personal achievement.
– Watch for repetitions
-Brief review for next class on Tuesday Rhetoric for Refutation
-Acknowledges that there are people with other beliefs.
– The purpose is to refute.
– Find someone with strong objections, refute his/her claims, quote as well in order to touch every point.
-Identify the point of view, be fair, acknowledge some truths to it, begin rebuttal.
If claim are consistent throughout what we do or write about and that our defintintion is always clear.
Look for aim and unique and universally constant definition when we write.
Don’t put the word impact because it doesn’t really hold a value and its doesn’t describe nothing
Also don’t use preview,just discuss it and avoid By because the it can put you in a bad trap and language
Notes November 15
I don’t think that I believe in the credibility of the source of the floating ship because as I read the article I hear them saying a lot of special conditions had to occur, in a certain part of the world, at a certain time for the photo to have been possible but I don’t hear any explanation of these specifics. I also see that the author is not the photographer himself so even though he may believe that there was no editing I don’t see why the picture couldn’t have been altered before the photo was sent.
Tip for writing : when we write make sure we prepare our audience before we introduce new claims, information, etc so they understand what is coming to them before not after the reading. For instance putting a you just saw scenic views sign after the scenic view defeats the purpose of the sign. Make sure to plot out information in a format relevant to your readers’ understanding. This can be done by having an established line of reasoning in your writing that doesn’t deter or alter as the argument develops. Reading over after you’re done writing can also help you catch when you are including irrelevant information after the statement has already been concluded. Once you read you can reorganize information and delete information as needed.
Unmask False analogy- something that is misidentified and inaccurately compared between two things in the opposing argument.
Unmask False Conclusion – find something that is not right or can be proven wrong in the argument. For instance if something is a statistic and says on average decipher what “on average” means
Painting the divergent opinion into a corner – gradually chipping away the opinion with little things agreed upon until the entire argument is agreed upon.
Reduce the definition of consent to absurdity – how many times do I have to check until you still mean no, basically say that something was never said yes, agreed upon, it was falsely followed to be a truth
Expose the duplicity of the argument – something that is stated or repeated as a common ground but actually isn’t
Brevity and Clarity – being clear and brief is much more effective to our argument than initially thought. If you are brief and clear you are first of all sounding professional and confident but you are also giving the audience less time and material to refute or disagree on.
Not Because- Avoid putting the presumably most important information in the beginning and make sure we give it special attention in regards to phrasing so that it doesn’t get misunderstood. For example instead of saying “ I don’t love you because you’re beautiful” say “ I love you for more than your beauty.
11/10
A meter was described as one 10 millionth in distance from the equator to the pole.
The kilogram had a stick as well. Anything that is not at the same weight of the object( the actual kilogram) then it isn’t a kilogram.
When you go to create a term in your argument you are able to do so but there is something in there that can’t be changed at all should never daunt us.
The perfect attendance award doesn’t promote perfect attendance.
Students who received recognition certificates were actually less likely to continue going to school every day than students who received nothing at all.
Reviewed the Natural Language section from the other day.
Prepare for class on tuesday by following the links
We often associate measurements with other measurements. In the past, there was usually some physical reference for the units. We as a species have moved past that practice mostly because anything that physically exists is subject to change no matter what. Instead, we now use universal constants, such as the speed of light and cycles of particle movements.
Heroin is not cool stuff. Vancouver agrees. The solution to the problem of heroin addicts committing crimes the province was quite clear: more heroin. Vancouver started giving out more heroin so that users would not commit crimes to get more heroin. This has solved the problem of crimes committed by addicts, but now they have more addicts. Not a good move.
To have a refutation in your piece is not to argue in the oppositions favor, but to respectfully acknowledge it.
Identify what the opposition’s POV is, accommodate it, then tear it up.
(these notes were taken day of in my notebook but I forgot to post them)