3 Responses to Hypothesis-AnonymousStudent

1. davidbdale says:

   September 12, 2022 at 11:59 AM

   Thank goodness you got more specific as the list progressed, AS, because I couldn’t even begin to guess what you meant from 1-4.

   Let’s look at 5 and 6, where the meat begins to cook.

   5. Students coming out of high school do not require the skills needed to flourish in adult life, from the fault of the school system.

   —”the skills needed to flourish” is exactly the sort of phrase that sounds reasonable and means precisely nothing. It’s easy to fix, but often gets overlooked because it SOUNDS like it means something. What are the skills? If you name them, you’re communicating.

   6. The School System in America intentionally restricts students’ capability to flourish in the adult world in order to maintain a supply of desperate and exploitable young adults.

   —This is bold and fun, worth arguing, and will present a big challenge worthy of your time and effort . . . but still hopelessly vague. What would qualify as “capability to flourish”?

   Is there a list of characteristics employers cite as “the reason we have to recruit students from overseas”? If so, that list would coincide with the skills American graduates lack. Have you looked?

   Ready for a conference?

   Mandatory Conferences

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   • AnonymousStudent says:

     September 12, 2022 at 12:15 PM

     Thank you for the great inputs professor. You are correct in the fact that steps 1-4 most likely could’ve been condensed into 1 or 2 steps instead, but I wanted to do my best in following the template. As for the finishing hypothesis, I do agree that it is vague, and I would infer that it was because I wrote that without a specific direction in the research. I wanted to get this statement down and try to find research that correlates so I can narrow it down further to an easily defensible essay. The example you used is very interesting, and certainly a path that I will look more into.

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     • davidbdale says:

       September 12, 2022 at 1:26 PM

       Thus begins the process. Share what you find and I will interfere in equally entertaining ways.

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