Rape is a crime that has plagued every society from the beginning of time to the present day. Rape is a topic that often remains undisputed. Many different cultures around the world handle rape differently and that’s where things get confusing. Everyone can agree that rape is a bad thing but not everyone agrees on who is responsible or how it should be handled. So how does one know when justice is truly served? What’s even worse is that the victim of rape can be blamed.
Dictionary.com defines rape as the unlawful compelling of a person through physical force or duress to have sexual intercourse. This definition is something close to how I vaguely defined rape but as I continued reading it seemed like the definition was simply reworded.
In 2010, A young woman in Afganisitan was attacked and raped by a family friend. But she was jailed because she become pregnant by her attacker and she wasn’t married to the man. Her imprisonment gained attention from human rights activists
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
“Rape is a crime that has plagued every society from the beginning of time to the present dayRape is a topic that often remains undisputed.”
You want to talk about if justice is truly served but you don’t say that you think it is or not? Maybe try starting like this?
Rape is one of the oldest crudest crimes to exist. Although it has been around longer than any of us it still hasn’t been fully brought into the limelight. Many victims themselves are blamed and true justice is not served.
Maybe?
The concentration on victims being blamed is useful, Marcus. What you mean by “bringing rape into the limelight” is too vague to help though. If you mean rape often goes unreported, that’s valuable. If you mean prosecutors don’t pursue cases that could result in convictions, that’s valuable. But until you specify what sort of attention is required, the job is only half done. (That goes for you too, Amanda 🙂 ) —DSH
stating how severe the crime of rape is is a great start, however you need to portray a way to stop it!!
I’m not sure that’s the job of the definition essay, Benjamin. This first draft doesn’t complete the job it should, but its inclusion of the Afghanistan example does indicate that Amanda will argue that rape is defined by the culture. How to “stop it” in America will be very different from how to stop it in Afghanistan. —DSH
“Rape is a crime that has plagued every society from the beginning of time to the present dayRape is a topic that often remains undisputed.”
I’m not sure what you are trying to say here. Also, check your punctuation.
The origins of rape are deeply rooted into any society, and its ramifications are never fully addressed.
Your confusion is understandable, Casmir, and your sentence is an improvement. What’s “undisputed” about rape is the least clear claim here. —DSH
“Since Adam raped Eve, women have deserved an explanation.” – David Hodges
Original:
Rape is a crime that has plagued every society from the beginning of time to the present dayRape is a topic that often remains undisputed. Many different cultures around the world handle rape differently and that’s where things get confusing. Everyone can agree that rape is a bad thing but not everyone agrees on who is responsible or how it should be handled. So how does one know when justice is truly served? What’s even worse is that the victim of rape can be blamed.
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In the first paragraph, you claim:
~Rape plagues society
~It always has
~Many countries have different ways of defining rape
~this becomes confusing
~It is argued who should be responsible
~When is justice served?
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Try making the first sentence sound interesting:
Rape has been one of the oldest crimes ever committed in many parts of the world, but what exactly defines rape?
Up to you, i just thought this sounded interesting and got most of your claims made in the paragraph down into one sentence.
Maybe more pertinent (and strategically better than a rhetorical question) but related to your sentence, Vinny, would be:
—DSH
“Rape is a crime that has plagued every society from the beginning of time to the present day. Rape is a topic that often remains undisputed. Many different cultures around the world handle rape differently and that’s where things get confusing.” The first 2 sentences can be interpreted as paradoxical depending on context. Technically they are disputed if separate cultures handle it differently. Upon further review I realized you didn’t mean this in that way, but more as a sidestepped topic.
As for advice to fix this. It is 430 and time for me to leave. try to…. do it over?
Drew points out one of several ambiguities in your opening, Amanda. —DSH
Amanda, this won’t do, as I’m sure you know. I’m not assigning any new work over the spring break, but you need to shape this into a presentable first draft before we get back. I know you’re capable of more and better.
The dictionary.com reference is the least valuable resource for a definition essay, ironically. No reader is interested in the definition we can all look up for ourselves. We need to know what about the way we use the word socially influences, shapes, or shatters our lives. The concepts inherent in rape: compulsion, coercion, negotiation, permission, force, consent, and many legal terms all have fluid meanings no dictionary can pin down. Concentrate on making a clear case that some sense can be made of the mayhem and that we need consensus on what constitutes a crime that occurs every few seconds in this country.
Grade recorded. Always improvable with revisions.
You’ve made no revisions since March 13, Amanda.
Time is running out.