Money Rewrite – Rachel Saltzman

The classic image of a child putting coins in a piggy bank resides within many of us. Purchasing anything was monumental; the piggy had to be smashed to access whatever money we had acquired. Of course, there was no point in destroying the bank if there wasn’t enough money inside to buy the latest action figure or dress-up doll. We eventually learned to save our birthday and chore allowances so we had more than enough money when the time came, much like our long gone ancestors had to.

Because of this upbringing, many of us have always perceived “money” as a physical entity. Thus we have never felt an overwhelming urge to spend our cash too freely. But credit cards make buying now and paying later a simple reality in economically sound countries like the United States. No wonder American consumers, carrying 4 credit cards on average, according to Statistic Brain‘s 2012 survey, are tempted to spend so much more money than they have. Underlying the credit trend is debt, which has become even more serious because of credit.

Debt for individuals and bankruptcy for larger groups are the ultimate results of spending too much money. Brazil knows this better than most; for almost 50 years, the country’s economy was in shambles because of such reckless spending. In 2011, this radio broadcast by This American Life recounted the financial struggles that enveloped the country after its government decided to produce too much money during the 1950s. Excess currency lead up to 80% inflation by the 1990s, making even basic necessities like milk cost almost two times as much as their original value.

In today’s times, it is not Brazil, but Japan that is about to suffer an economic crisis. Despite Japan having a public debt that, according to The New York Times, is twice the size of its economy, the Prime Minister Shinzo Abe has announced an economic stimulus of 12 trillion yen ($136 billion) for the country. Although economic stimulus does not necessarily create inflation, this will most likely lead to some of the similar economic problems that plagued Brazil for decades. The yen will become so devalued that no one will want to invest in Japan. The prices of goods will soar, leaving the Japanese people unable to pay for the basics. When will the global community learn that taking more than what you have will lead to severe consequences?

The lesson to be learned is don’t overspend. The island of Yap is quite famous for its ancient monetary system consisting of giant stone coins. According to Milton Friedman’s essay “The Island of Stone Money,” the islanders considered their currency to be so valuable because it was a “concrete manifestation of wealth.” The stones had to be carved, then transported over the ocean some 400 miles to the island. This currency worked because the people of Yap had a physical connection to their money. Simply put, if the stone coin did not exist, then the wealth did not exist. Our world of credit cards could learn a lot about economics from the people of Yap.

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About Rachel Saltzman

A promising young writer who is constantly developing and reevaluating her skills. Loves cats, Vietnamese food, and purple things.
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2 Responses to Money Rewrite – Rachel Saltzman

  1. Rachel Saltzman's avatar sadisutiku says:

    Can I have feedback?
    Feedback provided. —DSH

  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Hey, Rachel.
    P1. Yep.
    P2. The first stumble I see is “Thus we have never felt an overwhelming urge,” which is a backwards way to say that because money is physical, and holding it feels right, we have a strong desire to hang on to it, not the lack of an overwhelming urge to toss it. The difference is a matter of seeing the clouds or the sky, but in this case, you see clouds in the shape of money, not the absence of money in the blue.

    Following that, I’d like to see you make the point that credit cards make it so easy to part with what we’ve never felt in our hands. The credit card looks and feels the same whether we have thousands or just enough for chips.

    The temptation is probably not your point, Rachel. The spending is. What you say here is the equivalent of saying, “I’m happy to have the opportunity to be able to speak to you tonight,” when what you mean is: “I’m happy to speak to you.”

    Your last sentence needs re-thinking. Since debt can’t exist without credit, it can’t be credit that makes debt “more serious.” It makes debt possible. Maybe you mean ready access to credit for people who aren’t credit-worthy has created a debt crisis.

    P3. Odd dichotomy: larger groups can get into debt trouble, and individuals can go bankrupt, so . . . .?
    —better than most what? individuals? or larger groups? better than most debtors? better than most countries?
    —Excess currency led up
    —I’m certain I asked before, and you haven’t answered the crucial question: 80% how often? 80% a year is a whole different solar system than 80% a month.
    —Same question, different detail: milk costs twice as much today as: last year? last month? yesterday? All very different.
    You can’t ignore these details.

    P4. You’re doing really well until this clause:

    this will most likely lead to some of the similar economic problems that plagued Brazil for decades.

    The way to make those problems similar to something is this:

    this will most likely lead to economic problems similar to those that plagued Brazil for decades.

    Can you eliminate the “you” from your last sentence? Of course you can.

    P5. When you’re on, you’re really on, Rachel. There’s no actual proof here, but you still manage to make the illustration of the Yap work for you. Your barest claim that “this currency worked” is all you offer for proof, but you’ve done a nice job in the intervening paragraphs making us nostalgic for that piggy bank moment, so we feel the stone and respect it. Are you sure you don’t want to echo that piggy bank here for a curtain call before you bow out?

    Very nice work overall, but please make revisions and fix that inflation number problem.

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