Robust Verbs-Njdevilsred17

Posted on March 30, 2022 by njdevilsred17

In Vancouver, heroin addicts are committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program provides everything it can to stop the actions of the addicts. Therefore, the problem is that there is an increase in the crime rate because the addicts which have a hard time getting through their daily lives. Everyday activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of their heroin addiction. The addicts will do anything to be able to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes that are being committed by the addict include a break-in and stealing. The issue with the program is that they are not eliminating the addiction from the addicts’. The reason for the program is to try to save the city from rising crime rates that are higher than usual. By providing the addicts with a select amount of heroin they will stay off the streets preventing them from committing any street crimes. The administering of heroin will eliminate addicts from the hospitals. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This may make the street in the city safer but is not benefiting those that need help with their addiction.

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6 Responses to Robust Verbs-Njdevilsred17

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
    March 31, 2022 at 10:29 AM

    These are your Subjects and Verbs:
    there are heroin addicts
    The program is doing
    the problem is
    activities are hard to maintain
    This is like people
    they will do
    The types are being committed
    The problem is
    It is
    addicts will be
    This will keep
    It is pointless
    This program gives
    This may make

    If you gave a speech in which you were limited to declaring just your subjects and verbs, would anybody know what you were talking about?

    What if, instead, your three-word sentences (subjects and verbs and objects) looked like this:

    Addicts commit crimes.
    A program eliminates the crimes.
    Crime supports access to the drug.
    Addiction undermines productivity.
    Addiction drives criminality.
    Burglary and muggings support habits.
    The program reduces the crime rate.
    Free heroin reduces street crime.
    Free heroin reduces drug hospitalizations.
    Drug-related illness overburdens hospitals.
    The program delivers free clean heroin.
    Free heroin improves public safety.

    I’ve used your own paragraph for both analyses. In the first case, I recorded your actual subjects and verbs. In the second, I revealed the “three-word” fundamental sentence hiding in your sentences.

    Suppose, again, that you were giving a speech in which you were limited to declaring just your subjects, verbs, and direct objects. Would your audience have a BETTER or a WORSE idea what you were talking about?

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  2. njdevilsred17's avatar njdevilsred17 says:
    March 31, 2022 at 11:07 AM

    If you limited your audience with a limited amount of declared subjects, verbs, and, direct objects they would have a difficult time reading your writing and getting the point that you are trying to get across in each sentence.

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 31, 2022 at 1:06 PM

      Response 2.
      Not true.
      Shall I expand these limited sentences into more complex sentences, now that they’ve been identified, to demonstrate what I mean?

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    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
      March 31, 2022 at 1:09 PM

      Response 1.
      Well, of course.
      I’m not suggesting that giving speech of just three-word sentences would be THE BEST way to deliver your message.
      But, comparing your actual subjects/verbs/objects to the REVEALED subjects/verbs/objects, doesn’t the second version give your audience a MUCH BETTER idea of what you’re talking about?

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  3. njdevilsred17's avatar njdevilsred17 says:
    April 1, 2022 at 6:40 PM

    I had edited the paragraph did I correctly approach each sentence and is there anything that I should add to improve it.

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  4. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
    April 5, 2022 at 5:32 AM

    I appreciate the effort, NJ, but you’re missing the point.

    These are the sentences:
    Addicts commit crimes.
    A program eliminates the crimes.
    Crime supports access to the drug.
    Addiction undermines productivity.
    Addiction drives criminality.
    Burglary and muggings support habits.
    The program reduces the crime rate.
    Free heroin reduces street crime.
    Free heroin reduces drug hospitalizations.
    Drug-related illness overburdens hospitals.
    The program delivers free clean heroin.
    Free heroin improves public safety.

    The closer you can come to keeping the essential structure of those core sentences intact, the more you will be making your subject matter and a robust verb do their work.

    In Vancouver addicts are committing violent crimes to feed their addictions. But the “free heroin for addicts” program is eliminating the incentive for those crimes. The program provides access to clean, pure heroin once a day for addicts who have failed other forms of treatment. Addiction undermines productivity, making it impossible for addicts to support themselves and their habit. As a result, they turn to crime—muggings, burglaries, breaking and entering, prostitution—to support their addictions. Providing safe, free heroin eliminates the need for street crime and cuts down on drug-related hospitalizations too. While it doesn’t immediately get addicts off of drugs, the program improves public safety by taking the criminality out of addiction.

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