Weaknesses

I noticed that the author wasn’t as specific when explaining the differences to europe and america. I feel like they could have elaborated more instead of jumping to the intricate drop section. 

The sentences were not cohesive, and just didn’t really lead into each other, but instead jumped around until it eventually got to the point which was still unclear.

They were not specific enough in their point, it wasn’t clear whether they were comparing or just saying in general so it was hard to get the point. 

“The skincare industry” sentence and then the one following after would have been good if they went on to talk about the difference between the United states and Europe DSD. 

Some of the sentences are just misplaced/ need more explanation behind them. like

the nasal spray sentence. It kind of feels like a filler sentence instead of to back up their point

Strengths 

I really liked the section about intricate drops.

I really liked the last section, it was a good sentence to have to make a point if it