“Can’t We All Just Get Along?”
In recent years a number of people who have prestige and influence over others have stated that they are feminists. More specifically celebrity women have expressed their concern over the inequality between men and women. But the women who are calling themselves feminists seem to have a skewed view of feminism. Feminism a movement dedicated to achieving universal equality amongst sexes.
In the Huffington Post article “Beyoncé and the Oversimplification of Women Through Beauty”, author Ernest Owens discusses how superstar Beyonce Knowles has “redefined what it means to be feminist by putting her own twist on it.Beyonce Knowles have often stated in interviews that she’s a feminist. In December 2013, Beyonce released her anticipated fifth album and with that came a wave of discussion about her views on feminism. In her album, Knowles makes bold statements supporting feminism especially in her song “***Flawless”. In this song, she uses to recordings of Nigerian feminist Chimamanda Ngozi Adiche in which she argues that we should all be feminists. “We as women are expected to want to have achieve certain goals such as getting married and having children, but we don’t teach men to have those same aspirations” states Adiche in her lecture .Despite having this lecture in that song, it seems as though Beyonce is over sexualizing her femininity not only in her music but also in her performances. Her own personal politics can be seen as being sexist. Beyonce and many other female artists have used their bodies as body politics. Their bodies are used to get the message they are trying to send across to their audience.
Body Politics is defined as the practice and policies of society to control the human body, including the struggle over the degree of individual and social control of the body. The original intention of using body politics was to fight against the objectification of a woman’s body. It emphasized a woman’s power and authority over own body. It seems as though women in entertainment today are the one’s objectifying themselves without the help of any outside influences. Their provocative dance moves and the way women, especially singers, dress and is holding back the movement for women to considered equal among women.
Promoting sexuality is a marketing tool predominantly used by women. These days, it is used as a gateway for women in media to present their sexuality in a way that is slowly destroying everything that has been fought for.
Works Cited
Owens, Ernest. “Beyoncé and the Oversimplification of Women Through Beauty.” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 29 Jan. 2014. Web. 23 Apr. 2014.
“Body Politics – FEMINISM AND, RACIAL.” – Women, Bodies, Abortion, and Power. JRank Articles , 1 Jan. 2014. Web. 23 Apr. 2014.
Brenna, Elrich. “Katy Perry, Miley And Lorde: Did 2013 Move Feminism Backward?.” News. N.p., 9 Jan. 2014. Web. 23 Apr. 2014.
“We should all be feminists: Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie at TEDxEuston.” YouTube. YouTube, 12 Apr. 2013. Web. 5 May 2014.
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
feedback please. I didnt know how exactly to close this argument
Feedback provided. —DSH
P1. There are three pretty straightforward claims here, Amanda. Let’s make sure we understand them. Celebrities call themselves feminists. A feminist is “concerned” over the inequality of women. But those female celebrities are mistaken about feminism.
The trouble is, you haven’t said what feminism is, what it means, whether “concern” over inequality is the central principle or whether action is required. You can’t persuade us the celebrities “have it wrong” until we know you “have it right.” You need to go on the record.
P2. How in the world did “dropping her album” create discussion about feminism. (For starters, does dropping her album mean she stopped production and declined to release it? or does it mean she “dropped it” into the marketplace?)
OK, maybe we’re getting somewhere. Is sexuality incompatible with feminism? Then we certainly haven’t heard yet what feminism is, from you. (Also, who is meant by “it seems”? It seems to Amanda? Or “those critics who got all controversial about Beyonce’s album seem to think she’s too sexual”?)
Huh? Her interpretation of politics? Where did that come from? Are your readers supposed to know about Beyonce’s politics? And how is her body political? (Great sentence; what does it mean?)
P3. There’s some very sloppy grammar going on here, but oddly, at the same time, there’s a lot of language that doesn’t sound like yours. You haven’t made a single citation in three paragraphs yet, so, I have to ask, where does this material come from? You need to quote or at least cite the source for your paragraph about body politics, Amanda. It’s interesting and complex stuff that might be yours alone. But we need some clarity here. And you need to cite sources in a research paper.
Your point is that feminists have been trying to wrestle control of their bodies away from men, but Beyonce gives it all back to them by giving men exactly what they want from women, a sex object.
P4. Very unclear. I can’t tell whose positions are being represented here.
But, let’s be clear, the man who wears almost nothing and dances provocatively in solo self-abuse choreography to promote his album is hard to find, so the “men do it, why can’t I?” argument isn’t very persuasive.
Grade recorded. Improvable with revisions.
Graded for portfolio.