Coats wasn’t fired because he was using a legal drug, marijuana, for a legitimate purpose for which he had a prescription. He was fired for violating workplace policy.
With a legitimate purpose, Coats was using the legal drug marijuana which he had a prescription for, and was fired for violating workplace policy.
An employer isn’t able to fire a person who has anxiety because they are taking the correct medication to deal with the issue.
An employer is forbidden from firing a person who has anxiety and is dealing with the issue by taking medication.
Employees don’t get fired for going out and having a few beers after work because alcohol is legal, but in Colorado so is marijuana.
Marijuana is legal in Colorado, so there is no reason to fire coats using it like those employees that have a few beers after work.
Coats shouldn’t have been fired because he was trying to treat the pain he endured on a daily basis.
By no means, should Coats have been fired for trying to treat the pain he was dealing with daily.
It’s not fair to discriminate against him because he was able to ease the pain of his multiple spasms by using marijuana.
Coats used marijuana to ease his pain of multiple spasms, so discriminating against him was unfair and bitter.
Coats wasn’t harming anyone at his job because he was smoking marijuana but he was doing so on his own time and not at work.
Because Coats was smoking marijuana on his own time he was not causing harm to anyone at work.
Omar Gonzalez didn’t penetrate deep into the White House because of the swift actions of Secret Service agents.
Omar Gonzalez had no way to penetrate deep into the White House because of the swift actions of Secret agents .
The Secret Service isn’t being compelled to explain its actions because of the way it responded to the breach of the White House, but how the breach occurred is under question.
Because of the way the Secret Service responded to the breach that is under question, they were not compelled to explain the reason for their actions.
Secret Service chief Julia Pierson won’t be fired because of her testimony before Congress yesterday. Her incompetence might cost her her job though.
Because of Julia Pierson’s testimony before Congress yesterday she was not fired but her incompetence may cost Julia her job.
Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against the intruder because he was carrying a knife with a 4-inch blade.
Because the intruder was carrying a small size weapon the Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against them.
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Counterintuitive Fall 2022 
Coats was fired for violating workplace policy because he was using a legal drug, marijuana, for a legitimate purpose for which he had a prescription.
—Your explanation makes it sound as if employees will always be fired for using legal drugs for legitimate purposes.
Because a person who deals with anxiety and takes the correct medication the employer is not able to fire them.
—If you can see what’s wrong with this sentence: [Because the boy who cried wolf, nobody believed him.] you’ll see what’s wrong with yours.
Because it is legal for the employees that go out and have a few beers after work the employer isn’t able to fire them as alcohol is legal.
—Same problem, plus this time you repeat yourself: 1) Because it is legal, 2) as alcohol is legal.
Because Coats was trying to treat the pain he was dealing with he should have not been fired.
—I’ll take it!
Because he was able to ease the pain of multiple spasms by using marijuana it is unfair to discriminate against him.
—Also just fine.
Because Coats was smoking marijuana on his own time there was no harm to anyone at his job.
—OK.
Because of the swift actions of Secret agents Omar Gonzalez had no way to penetrate deep into the White House.
—Nice.
Because of the way the Secret Service responded to the breach they were not compelled to explain its
—This is missing half of a solution.
Because of Julia Pierson’s incompetency she might be fired from her job although she had a testimony before congress.
—Incomplete.
Because the intruder was carrying a knife with a 4-inch blade the Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against them.
—A better version would indicate that it was the small size of the weapon, not the fact that he was carrying one, that saved Gonzalez from deadly force.
Feel free to revise these, NJ. You don’t want to stick with these versions.
Hi professor, thank you for letting me know what I was doing wrong when editing the sentences. I have looked over the comments that you have made and fixed those sentences. Would you be able to let me know if I am on the right track and also what else I could add to make them better?
Second Round:
Coats was fired for using marijuana which violates the workplace policy.
—This sentence is a perfectly good causal claim. But it neglects a lot of material that should be incorporated for a complete and accurate translation. Even though, for a legitimate purpose, Coats was using a legal drug for which he had a prescription, he was fired for violating workplace policy. I admit that’s a very complex sentence, but I’m not responsible for the original material. A student wrote it. 🙂
An employer isn’t able to fire a person who has anxiety and is dealing with the issue by taking medication.
—This is good, too, but not the strongest it could be. You’re still leaning on a negative form of your primary verb when a positive form is available. Employers ARE PROHIBITED from firing . . . .
Employees don’t get fired for going and having a few beers after work because alcohol and marijuana are legal in Colorado.
—The original author left you the terrible problem of resolving a flawed contradiction. You’ve correctly turned BUT into AND. The resulting sentence is still weird, but it’s not your fault. The logic of the original is SUPPOSED TO BE: Marijuana is legal in Colorado, so it makes no more sense to fire Coats for using it than to fire employees for having a few beers after work.
By no means, Coats should have been fired for trying to treat the pain he was dealing with daily.
—This is a clever way to turn the negative SHOULD NOT into BY NO MEANS SHOULD HAVE, NJ. But you have to get the word order just right: By no means SHOULD Coats HAVE BEEN FIRED . . . . Otherwise, your sentence still contains the toxic phrase: “Coats should have been fired.”
Because he was able to use marijuana to ease his pain of multiple spasms discriminating against him was unfair.
—This is very nice. The stickler in me would still tweak it a bit, of course. Using marijuana is the point, not his ability to use it. So: Coats was using marijuana to ease the pain of spasms, so discriminating against him was cruel and unfair.
Because Coats was smoking marijuana on his own time he was not causing harm to anyone at work.
—PERFECT.
I’ll end there, NJ. Tweak your Coats sentences if you want to; then see if this round of hints will help you revise the Gonzalez items.
Yes, I agree the context of the original sentences was a bit confusing so this may be the reason why I am a bit confused about what the writer meant when writing these sentences. I have looked at the comments that you have made and used those to make some more revisions. Would you be able to take a look at them and let me know if I got the sentences to be stronger and with a subject-verb and idea in there?
They’re better, NJ, but some could still be clearer.
—Because of the swift actions of Secret agents, Omar Gonzalez had no way to penetrate deep into the White House.
—The Secret Service is not being compelled to explain why it responded to the breach of the White House the way that it did.
—She won’t be fired for her testimony before Congress yesterday, but her incompetence may cost Julia Pierson her job.
—Because the intruder was carrying ONLY a short-bladed knife, the Secret Service agents didn’t use deadly force against him.