Causal Rewrite – rushhourillusion

Background Music Leads to Positive Outcome

Music improves our mood, reduces stress, and promotes our overall well-being. Whether intently listening to music while doing a task, or having music play as a comforting background to our everyday activities, we perform better, and feel better, with music than without. Background music, specifically, focuses our attention on the task at hand. 

Something as simple as background music, can really cause work productivity and more focused attention. The brain becoming more stimulated allows for better performance while focusing and completing tasks. Cognitive behavior is known as brain activity, as cognitive is another word for brain or mental put with the behavior that comes from it. Anything that engages the brain would be considered cognitive behavior. Clearly, background music helps to focus the brain. 

In The Effect of Background Music on Cognitive Task Performance, written by Yalda Dabiran, the more cognitive function is discussed in comparison to background music specifically. One thing I wanted to point out that Dabiran said is, “According to the results of a study, background music showed its positive effect on the efficiency of the operator while performing a repetitive assembly job. Based on the results for fast repetitive industry tasks, there is a tendency for arousal level to drop off, and a stimulus such as background music can prevent this issue if used close to the end of the efficiency period (Fox and Embrey 1972).”  One thing that Dabiran tends to focus on throughout her essay is the arousal of background music on the brain. This arousal can really cause the cognitive behavior to increase especially the appeal, or arousal, of background music on the brain. Through that Yalda explained that there was a positive outcome which was a greater efficiency that resulted from music being played. Which concludes that music within the workplace allowed for an increase in overall performance while still getting their objective tasks completed.

In The Effect of Background Music on Cognitive Task Performance, written by Yalda Dabiran, the more cognitive function is discussed in comparison to background music specifically. One thing I wanted to point out that Dabiran said is, “According to the results of a study, background music showed its positive effect on the efficiency of the operator while performing a repetitive assembly job. Based on the results for fast repetitive industry tasks, there is a tendency for arousal level to drop off, and a stimulus such as background music can prevent this issue if used close to the end of the efficiency period (Fox and Embrey 1972).”  One thing that Dabiran tends to focus on throughout her essay is the arousal of background music on the brain. Background music arouses the brain to increase cognitive behavior. Through that Yalda explained that there was a positive outcome which was a greater efficiency that resulted from music being played. Concluding music within the workplace allowed for an increase in overall performance while completing tasks. 

There is something known as the “Mozart Effect.” As explained in Dabiran’s essay, “A study indicated that playing Mozart music when taking math tests lead to a significant improvement in students’ test scores.” Instead of focusing on the workplace, the school environment is another place that is very task focus driven. Although Yalda observed that, “Another study investigated the effect of music on brain waves using EEG (Electroencephalogram).” Showing how effective music was on the cognitive aspect of the study. (still two fragments) This shows the correlation between the two, but specifically how one triggers the other’s performance. Ultimately this shows that music improves performance. 

Studying equals the retaining of information such as studying information to take a test.  As stated in Music in the Workplace Environment and Productivity by Kyle Schoenwald, “Most students listen to music while studying, but most often are not allowed to listen to music while taking a test. The results of this study by Lemaire argued that when listening to music, individuals have a more positive effect when it comes to memory of the information.” These overall states that music is proven very effective during studying due to how it helps with memorization. Although these students may not be able to listen to music during a test, the music helps during the studying process. Retaining the information is the most important part of an education so as one studies and listens to the background music, the better one might perform on a test or task that they practiced for. 

Within the same essay, Schoenwald also makes another great point about the following, “If the task requires people to be relaxed and focused, slow music might be more attractive as this slows the heart rate for focus. If the task requires some encouragement, for example a presentation was to be given; this may require more upbeat music.” This was also a very good point made because different genres of music, tempos, lyrics and such can trigger different emotions as well as different parts of the cognitive behavior. This includes as said, slower music might prove more useful with focus as it slows the heart rate. While more upbeat music can create a more energetic wave, it is probably more useful to completion in a creative project setting. This is a key aspect to the levels of background music, which shows that although these different key points to music can alternate different behaviors, the background music is still proven useful in these settings. Especially when the music is a preferred background music as stated by Kiss and Linell in The effect of preferred background music on task-focus in sustained attention, “Preferred background music can enhance task-focused attentional states on a low-demanding sustained-attention task and are compatible with arousal mediating the relationship between background music and task-performance.”

Concluding this topic, background music is very influential to the performance of one task and work. This background music might only be something that is considered minor to just any normal person, but diving deeper into the bigger picture. (Still a fragment) Which is that  the music is proven to be effective in more than one way, when considering the tempo  of the music and preferred music can trigger this function. (Still a fragment) With these many different studies, as well, proving that background music causes focus and an increase in cognitive performance on given various tasks. (Still a fragment) As stated in Kiss and Linnells study,

Importantly, listening to preferred background music was found to increase task-focus and decrease mind-wandering states on a low-demanding sustained-attention task although it did not affect overall RT. The increase in task-focus states provides evidence for music’s ability to improve focused attention and performance—by increasing arousal to an intermediate level optimal for performance—and suggests that people can derive benefit from music listening while performing low-demanding tasks. This study proving once again, background music is beneficial to one’s mind.

References

Kiss, Luca, and Karina J. Linnell. “The Effect of Preferred Background Music on Task-Focus in Sustained Attention – Psychological Research.” SpringerLink, Springer Berlin Heidelberg, 3 Aug. 2020, https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s00426-020-01400-6

Dabiran, Y. (2017). The effect of background music on cognitive task performance (Order No. 10622588). Available from ProQuest Dissertations & Theses Global. (1988352353). Retrieved from http://ezproxy.rowan.edu/login?qurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.proquest.com%2Fdissertations-theses%2Feffect-background-music-on-cognitive-task%2Fdocview%2F1988352353%2Fse-2%3Faccountid%3D13605   

Schoenwald, K. (2020). Music in the workplace environment and productivity (Order No. 27739886). Available from ProQuest Dissertations & Theses Global. (2384540781). Retrieved from http://ezproxy.rowan.edu/login?qurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.proquest.com%2Fdissertations-theses%2Fmusic-workplace-environment-productivity%2Fdocview%2F2384540781%2Fse-2%3Faccountid%3D13605 

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10 Responses to Causal Rewrite – rushhourillusion

  1. davidbdale says:

    Ordinarily I delay notes about style and grammar until later drafts, but the semester is getting late already, RH, so I’m going to jump in with a few observations about your first paragraph and hope you will apply them to the rest of your essay and your writing going forward.

    Music allows for so many positive effects such as an increase in mood, well-being, reduction of stress and more.

    —Making lists creates challenges, RH. Here you have three nouns/noun phrases that need to be parallel (as similar as possible in content and syntax). One of yours is an increase, one is a decrease, the other one is neutral. We could fix that, but while we’re here, why not substitute robust verbs for the always-weaker nouns? If we do it right, we won’t have to waste words saying the effects are “positive effects.” We’re going to use First Person Plural (we) to create a bond with our readers.
    NEW: “Music improves our mood, reduces stress, and promotes our overall well-being.”
    It is good for so many different activities in one’s everyday life.
    —We’ve got a really weak verb here (is). And we’re making a vague and very bland claim about “so many different activities.” I don’t know what to do with this sentence yet, but cutting it would not be a big loss.

    Whether intently listening to music doing a task, or having music play as a comforting background noise.

    —This is not a sentence, RH. It’s a fragment that needs an independent clause to connect to. Let’s combine it with the previous sentence and make a claim about background music.
    NEW: “Whether intently listening to music while doing a task, or having music play as a comforting background to our everyday activities, we perform better, and feel better, with music than without.”

    Background music specifically is very good for focusing on a task and having a very uplifting mood while concentrating.

    —Looking ahead, it appears we’re spending two sentences to make the same claim about background music. Let’s combine the two.
    NEW: “Background music, specifically, focuses our attention on the task at hand.”

    So far:

    Music improves our mood, reduces stress, and promotes our overall well-being. Whether intently listening to music while doing a task, or having music play as a comforting background to our everyday activities, we perform better, and feel better, with music than without. Background music, specifically, focuses our attention on the task at hand.

    What do you think?
    Notice all the positive, active verbs.
    improves / reduces / promotes / perform / feel / focuses
    It’s simple, straightforward, concise, and hits all your primary claims.

    Will that help you when you’re ready to polish the rest of your work?

  2. davidbdale says:

    I’ve noted some more fragments by making them bold in your text, RH. Please discuss this with me. I can help you recognize the problem and avoid it.

  3. davidbdale says:

    I can help with more than just sentence structure, RH, but your fragment problem is severe and should probably get our attention first. Please reach out for help on this.

    • rushhourilllusion says:

      Thank you for your feedback professor. I apologize for the many mistakes. I will read the feedback more thoroughly as well as your adjustments to my work and rewrite accordingly.

      • davidbdale says:

        Are you comfortable recognizing the difference between a legal sentence and a fragment, Rush?

        • rushhourilllusion says:

          Not completely, I remember you discussing them in class before. I am going to do some research in the meantime to try to understand them more to improve my sentences.

  4. rushhourilllusion says:

    I revised the first two paragraphs; I am going to try and fix the fragments but keep them in bold so you can see the changed and adjusted sentences.

  5. davidbdale says:

    I’m taking this out of Feedback Please until you either 1) fix your fragments and remove the bold and red type or 2) reach out to me for help on this issue. We can zoom a tutoring session on fragments if you want. Or stay after class Monday. This may be the most important lesson, for you, from Comp II.

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